Steve,

Thanks for the review. Yeah you're right. I added additional dialogue for Pete and Otto for that very reason - backstory. As I knew it was going along at a quick pace. I think it does go right for the heart, with the flashback adding a little to the backstory. I tried to keep this as simple as possible.

Funny, I don't necessarily think of Otto as a murderer. I mean, he is yes, but given the circumstance I just felt like thinking out of the box in making Pete's demise as original as possible. I wanted you to root for Otto. And I think we do. I guess startling was what I was going for.

As for horror. It had horror elements to it, but I was advised, and agree its more a drama.  Just, you know, with horrific elements.   Thanks again.

Steve

First off, a very nice little script. Well-told, straight to the point.

However, I gotta say I was surprised. Otto's actions did surprise me but it was more of that HE was the one to do it. I don't about anyone else but I thought the twist was that The Stuffed Bear was actually sentient.

That this was a secret Otto knew. I was thinking this stuffed bear was gonna dish out some justice. I wasn't disappointed that this wasn't the case, but it might be a cool angle to explore.

Nonetheless, I really enjoyed this one. Keep up the good work, man! Can't wait to see an expanded story.

Happy Writing!

-Austin

Austin,

Wow! Thanks for digging this up. I’m glad it worked for you. It was written so long ago, and I really don’t have any further plans for it. Just kind of a little shock value piece and, as written, never thought about expanding on this. Part of the reason the bear never came to life, I guess, is that would’ve been difficult to film. I try to write shorts that would be easy for someone to make, and adding in FX for the bear would’ve been a tough one. Then again, it never got picked up so what does that tell you?

I have a new script up here called The Woodworker. You’re more than welcome to have a quick look at that one, and if you have anything you’d like me to read just let me know. Thanks again.

Steve

Hey, Steve

I get it. Especially if you're trying to sell a script. Makes total sense. I've had to learn that lesson the hard way.

But yes, I would love to take a look at your other works. I have a script that should be uploaded tomorrow and if you wouldn't mind, I'd love to come back here and direct you towards it.

Until we talk again,

Happy Writing!

-Austin

Sounds good, Austin.  Let me know.

Hey there, Steven

My first script is up. Here is the link:

http://www.simplyscripts.com/original-unproduced-scripts.html


I started reading your script, The Woodworker.  I'm about 15 pages in. It flows really well! Looking forward to finishing it later on. I'll let you know more soon!

Until then,

Happy Writing!

-Austin

Thanks, Austin. I’ll get on it soon.