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Posted: April 15th, 2018, 3:44pm Report to Moderator

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Death to the King by Simon Parker - Short, Sci Fi, Fantasy - Sent out with a scroll a young man is picked up by the kings chief interrogator. Give the names of those involved and his life will be spared. But this is a test where not all is as it seems. 5 pages - pdf, format

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Posted: April 18th, 2018, 6:03pm Report to Moderator
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Your title page is very off centre, not really a big problem.

There are a lot of really awkwardly written sentences.

Not much of a story here without any context. Who’s the king? Why does he have to die? Why is Phillip the man to do it? Why does he need to be tested?

It left me with more questions than answers.

A bit of backstory may make this more effective.

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