Thanks everyone who enjoyed this!
I enjoyed frantically writing it on the day, right down to the wire.
Yes, some things definitely need clarification and fixing.
A couple of things requiring an answer: -
Mark, the enchanted ornament and its magic were ramped up in the longer draft - it was meant to magically appear on Molly's pillow that Christmas Eve morning, and keep appearing, but it got edited out for page length.
Dave, that one little comma omission - inserting it would have taken me onto a next line..
Like my old uni flat - made me laugh,
Matty.
Rob, 'feck, 'feckin' just Irish slang for the other f-word.
The timeline needs tweaking and the wording in the News broadcast for sure. I was thrilled not too many people harped on about that.
Yes, the flashback needed detail and a better segue.
Some like the ending, some not.
Things do need some fixing over all.
Wondering if it's worth a rewrite, or if it should just slink off into OWC annals?
The overall favourable comments and high compliments really made my day. Thanks, guys.
I was stoked with
tied second place!
I never get a big head in this household however, cause as Hubby said to me:
Donald Trump got second place too.