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A Gathering Of Legends - OWC (currently 4479 views) |
Don |
Posted: October 24th, 2015, 11:02am |
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LocationVirginia Posts16561 Posts Per Day 1.92 |
A Gathering Of Legends by Lucy Westenra - Short, Horror - Three Internet buddies finally meet in person, only to confront an ancient evil. - pdf, format |
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Scar Tissue Films |
Posted: October 24th, 2015, 4:41pm |
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RKeller |
Posted: October 24th, 2015, 5:39pm |
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Feels cliquish, as if it cracks wise with inside jokes, winks and nods. Didn't make it through page 3. If I got that wrong, please let me know after Halloween and I'll take another read. |
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: October 24th, 2015, 6:01pm |
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No attempt made at a serious story. It's not funny, and aimed toward an audience of only 3. I'm not one of those three, because my name isn't Jeff, Stevie or Ryan.
1 out of 10. |
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bert |
Posted: October 24th, 2015, 6:09pm |
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LocationThat's me in the corner Posts4237 Posts Per Day 0.60 |
Yeah, just getting my comment in early to avoid bumping this later on.
I gave it 2 full, fair pages to grab me, but no.
bert's grade: Ungraded |
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MarkRenshaw |
Posted: October 25th, 2015, 6:54am |
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LocationUK Posts2326 Posts Per Day 0.56 |
A simply scripts spoof/pisser. Sorry but no. |
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ScenesUnwritten |
Posted: October 25th, 2015, 12:00pm |
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LocationBrooklyn, NY Posts18 Posts Per Day 0.01 |
Seemed like inside jokes I didn't get.
PROS: The dialogue about cricket while mayhem goes on the in background was pretty good. I liked the setting of the bar.
CONS: Felt like I was missing something the entire time. Dialogue during murder/mayhem goes on too long. You can cut the whole beginning about the plane and get right too it. |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: October 25th, 2015, 3:36pm |
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LocationUK Posts4367 Posts Per Day 1.10 |
My opinions are just that, and have been known to be wrong!
Picky bits:- 1) Think it's a pisser. 2) Yes it's a pisser. 3) Legends???
Good bits:- 1) Did I mention it's a pisser
Rules Well it's got a classic monster
Overall I thought this was well written enough, but didn't make me laugh and wasn't really in the spirit of the OWC.
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irish eyes |
Posted: October 25th, 2015, 9:48pm |
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January Project Group There`s too much blood in my alcohol
LocationUpstate New York Posts1861 Posts Per Day 0.35 |
This was well written and had comedy throughout, I think if the writer hadn't mentioned 3 SS members it might have been taken more seriously.
Although as always writing comedy in the OWC gives the reader the lazy review of 'Pisser' even if it's not.
There's actually a story and a setting to this script, it could have been trimmed down but it made me laugh out loud in some parts. As you mentioned in the script... it had a Dusk till Dawn theme going on. The introduction of a previous OWC monster was clever and it all came together in the end. I enjoyed it and I think if peeps looks past the fact that it includes 3 SS members, there's a pretty good short here.
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Dreamscale |
Posted: October 25th, 2015, 11:50pm |
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The good news...
I love pissers.
Any script with myself and Stevie in it is a good start.
Lots of funny lines and even a funny premise.
I actually did LOL numerous times.
The not so good news...
I don't talk like that...at all!
Lots...and I mean lots of missing apostrophes.
Scenes not remotely broken up correctly.
The bad news...
The Bunny Man? Again? Really? Mate...ah man...
Which leads me to my grade of...
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Gum |
Posted: October 26th, 2015, 12:55am |
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LocationSome travelling Circus... Posts839 Posts Per Day 0.39 |
I get a kick out of the Bunny Man scripts eh. For a Sunday night this was some laugh out loud funny sh!t.
I got a kick out of the airline snippet as well, it was like a straight in your face 'Gaslighting' technique from the mainstream media. Even bad rhetoric is funny when you're telling it like it is |
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JonnyBoy |
Posted: October 26th, 2015, 2:07pm |
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LocationLondon, England Posts994 Posts Per Day 0.17 |
I did actually start to write a review of this, but then realised I was using time I should be giving to actual entries. So in summary - I smiled a couple of times, and you clearly enjoyed writing it, but I wonder if Don should even post these entries when no attempt has been made to enter into the spirit of the challenge. |
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Reef Dreamer |
Posted: October 27th, 2015, 3:14pm |
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LocationThe Island of Jersey Posts2609 Posts Per Day 0.54 |
I'll guess this is Bert's - I'm wise like that |
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IamGlenn |
Posted: October 29th, 2015, 11:40am |
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I take it this is a pisser then. Didn't find anything funny here though. Not for me. |
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Grandma Bear |
Posted: October 30th, 2015, 10:31am |
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LocationThe Swamp... Posts8047 Posts Per Day 1.33 |
Read this one awhile ago, but didn't comment. I'm back though because even if I wasn't too crazy about it, I wanted you to know that I did read it. Every now and then, someone writes a script using members here at SS as their characters. Sometimes they are fabulous other times not. IMO, I think the key to writing a good one is to realy know these people. The more you know them, the better and funnier the script will be. It also helps to have as many members as possible mentioned, otherwise, like Dustin said, I wasn't in it so I didn't care. |
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