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 Straight To Video (currently 3019 views) |
| Don |
| Posted: August 6th, 2005, 12:29pm |
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AdministratorAdministrator  So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts17179 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
Straight To Video by Andrew Roby - Short, Comedy - James, a video store employee is in for the night of his life as two robbers are in his store. 6 pages - html, format  |
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You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take.
- Wayne Gretzky
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| Don - March 14th, 2006, 11:27pm | | |
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| Antemasque |
| Posted: August 6th, 2005, 11:12pm |
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Been Around  the ocean floor is hidden from your viewing lens
LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
This is one of my older shorts which i thought would be good to submit. I hope you all enjoy this. |
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| Impulse |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 2:54pm |
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LocationMO Posts329 Posts Per Day 0.04 |
Sort of spoilers
Those two jerks shot a woman in the head, a guy in the chest just to get porn movies? Huh. Realistic movie that guy has there. Nice twist at the end, though. Funny. |
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| Antemasque |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 11:21pm |
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Been Around the ocean floor is hidden from your viewing lens
LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
So what do you think overall of it? Good? Bad? Or What? |
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| Sham |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 11:26pm |
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LocationUSA Posts359 Posts Per Day 0.05 |
It's cheesy and unrealistic, but it works. Know why? Because you have a funny ending that makes it worthwhile. It had me laughing. |
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| Antemasque |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 11:31pm |
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Been Around the ocean floor is hidden from your viewing lens
LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
Then my job is accomplished  |
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| Huggybear |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 11:39pm |
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That was so funny at the end... It had me cracking up hysterically. My God what a funny script. Wow. What a nice ending...
"Oh shit"
Great ending |
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| Impulse |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 11:47pm |
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LocationMO Posts329 Posts Per Day 0.04 |
So what do you think overall of it? Good? Bad? Or What? |
The ending made it for me. Like I said, it was unrealistic but the end made up for it. |
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| Antemasque |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 11:49pm |
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Been Around the ocean floor is hidden from your viewing lens
LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
Good.
I was aiming for a ending that would make people laugh. Thank you for reading this. |
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| Impulse |
| Posted: August 7th, 2005, 11:51pm |
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LocationMO Posts329 Posts Per Day 0.04 |
Hey, if you want you can scroll down the forum and read "Talent" (sorry, shameless plug but Phil does it all the time  ) |
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| Antemasque |
| Posted: January 8th, 2006, 9:27pm |
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Been Around the ocean floor is hidden from your viewing lens
LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
If you haven't read this then you should.
It'll give you a good laugh. |
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| Zombie Sean |
| Posted: January 8th, 2006, 10:11pm |
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Old Timer  R.I.P.
LocationI said Texas, she said What? Posts1639 Posts Per Day 0.23 |
Haha funny ending. Loved it.
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| Stephen Wegmann |
| Posted: January 8th, 2006, 10:15pm |
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New  huh.
LocationThe Americana Posts78 Posts Per Day 0.01 |
I'm not sure what to think of that. It was funny, yes, but also strange. I mainly found the violence too random. Good twist at the end though.
props |
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| Antemasque |
| Posted: January 8th, 2006, 10:34pm |
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Been Around the ocean floor is hidden from your viewing lens
LocationBaltimore, MD Posts558 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
It was meant to be random. All of it meant for the man's reaction and the build up to the twist at the end. |
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| Stephen Wegmann |
| Posted: January 8th, 2006, 10:38pm |
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New huh.
LocationThe Americana Posts78 Posts Per Day 0.01 |
That makes sense. Without the violence he wouldn't really care when the twist came around (the man watching the video, that is). |
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