Writer,

I really like the misdirect at the beginning, when it jumped to the end? Wow, really well done. The writing needs some work though, a lot of OTN dialogue and some passive description, which isn't really a huge issue when the story is so good, quick fixes.  Fix up the dialogue and some of the description and you're golden I think.

Good Work!

This is a solid entry, with a positive conclusion. I want to hear the rest of the cow joke. The dialogue in the bar can probably be sharpened.

Funny, but I thought the marathon wasn't real, that it was a metaphor for his motivation to keep alive despite his injuries. It was just surreal enough to work that way. The baby and his prosthetic leg could be his subconscious already aware of those things even before he has registered them in his conscious mind.

Since it seems to not be that, the ending is a step backwards for me. Revealing the leg seemed obvious after he has a prosthetic one. The rest worked well enough, though the writing is rough. A decent story though.

Thank you one and all for the feedback, as always it has been invaluable.
A few comments on my dialogue being too OTN. That's absolutely right, it is. I've pondered why this is and now I know. It's my job.
Working in healthcare, I write several reports a day and everything has to be accurate and fully explained. I've been doing it for 33 years and it's a habit I find it hard to break. I HAVE to explain everything, this is why I feel my writing has to be too accurate and I cannot leave the reader to figure things out for themselves or leave an ending unexplained.
It's something for me to work on.
Well done to everyone who submitted a script, I enjoyed reading them all and have learned quite a lot from them
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