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What Goes Around Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 6:05pm
What Goes Around by Pablo E. Vizcarrondo III  - Short, Drama - A drenched Neisha is offered a ride, but will she make it home?  6 pages - pdf format

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Tenebris Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 6:05pm
Tenebris by Mak Purdon - Short, Drama - A man succumbs to his demons, in an exploration of depression and it's effects on those it touches. 2 pages - pdf format

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The Golden Mile Gauntlet Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 6:05pm
The Golden Mile Gauntlet by David M. Hall - Short, Horror, Monsters, Action - A desperate prostitute, must find a way to pay her ruthless pimp or run a deadly gauntlet of fun-house monsters.  77 pages

contest: 13horror.com June 2020 Finalist

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Prince and the Protester Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 6:04pm
Prince and the protester by Simon Parker - Romantic Comedy - Prince is a bored rich kid low on confidence and facing huge expectations from his wealthy parents. But one night seeing a young pretty protester getting arrested for splashing red paint onto real fur coats, he decided to pay her bail. These two then challenge one another, and agree to try out the others lifestyle, both believing the other has the easy life. 99 pages - pdf format

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Finding Elizabeth Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Today, 6:04pm
Finding Elizabeth by Jim Duncanson - Short, Drama - The impact a young woman had on people who knew her is reflected on camera, knowing they will never see her again. 9 pages - pdf format

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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: FrankM
Date Posted: Today, 5:59pm
I think the third one might be doing a ďwavy armsĒ thing, would be clearer if it ended in an underscore rather than a dash.

Hope to be in this one, itís been a long time since Iíve really been able to participate around here. Work stuff. Family stuff. Some 2020 thrown in for good measure.
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The People in the Trees (was The Creeps)   (reply) Posted by: eldave1
Date Posted: Today, 5:17pm
Nice!
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The People in the Trees (was The Creeps)   (reply) Posted by: ericdickson
Date Posted: Today, 5:03pm
Cathy Podewell from Night of the Demons officially signed on to play Kim.  A few more casting announcements in the coming weeks.    

  
https://www.facebook.com/peopleinthetrees  


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Honey Mustard - feature   (reply) Posted by: spesh2k
Date Posted: Today, 3:21pm

Quoted from eldave1


Speaking of adding stuff.....

Not sure if this helps, but when I first read this I had a thought that it would be cool if Buford forced Stella to serve him Honey Mustard. Right here:

I'd have him with a plate of chicken fingers and a bottle of honey mustard admonishing Stella that all you had to do was your fucking job. Have her give Stella the bottle - command that she pour some on the plate - she refuses - spits on him or something - then the thumb into the shoulder wound - POUR THE FUCKING HONEY MUSTARD - then he spots the photo of Matilda  - continue the scene.

Just thought it would be a neat full circle trick - didn't mention it the first time because didn't want to suggest adding p
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Honey Mustard - feature   (reply) Posted by: eldave1
Date Posted: Today, 1:50pm

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Yeah, I'm definitely considering changing that and making her live while also considering adding another 10 pages or so, extending the ending so that there's not another "guy we thought was dead comes out of nowhere" moment again -- there's a few of them in this already. I liked Heretic's idea of Hardley arriving to find Buford devastated by the death of his family -- while also perhaps adding humor there. I was thinking of Buford picking up pieces of his son and hugging them or something lol. Still mulling the climax though, not sure whether or not I want the story to leave the house or not. I was thinking, since a small town and it would take a while for an ambulance to arrive, Hardley maybe gets Buford in
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Be Someone.   (reply) Posted by: eldave1
Date Posted: Today, 1:29pm

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Eldave1 - Thanks for the read and valid comments/input. I checked my format spacing on my software. Darn, yeah it was out! Thanks.  I battle with trying to picture NY (America) I compare it to my homeland of South Africa where every town has a central and we don't really have bus stops, but taxi ranks/stops... etc. The rest of, I see what you saying and I'll neaten-up accordingly. Thanks again for taking the time.

Yuvraj - Thanks for the read. And yeah, like Eldave1 said. A clean-up. Glad you liked the story.  


You're welcome. Hint - when I write for locals that I am not familiar with I do a Google search and click images. For example: If you Google New York City bus stop, you'll ge...

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The Monkey's Paw   (reply) Posted by: spesh2k
Date Posted: Today, 12:15pm
Thanks, Libby! I'll try to get in touch with him.

-- Michael
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Be Someone.   (reply) Posted by: BarryJohn
Date Posted: Today, 11:16am
Eldave1 - Thanks for the read and valid comments/input. I checked my format spacing on my software. Darn, yeah it was out! Thanks.  I battle with trying to picture NY (America) I compare it to my homeland of South Africa where every town has a central and we don't really have bus stops, but taxi ranks/stops... etc. The rest of, I see what you saying and I'll neaten-up accordingly. Thanks again for taking the time.

Yuvraj - Thanks for the read. And yeah, like Eldave1 said. A clean-up. Glad you liked the story.  
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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: Grandma Bear
Date Posted: Today, 11:15am
I think that second one looks like it's scratching its head.
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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: Matthew Taylor
Date Posted: Today, 11:12am

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\_( .")>.  This one looks like facepalm.


I see it.

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If I squint, I can also see two people bumping elbows
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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: Grandma Bear
Date Posted: Today, 10:46am
\_( .")>.  This one looks like facepalm.
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Final Imagine/Impact genre revealed...   (reply) Posted by: AnthonyCawood
Date Posted: Today, 10:10am
Hey James, yes I got a standard email saying thanks but no thanks... probably make it a pair this time round
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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: AnthonyCawood
Date Posted: Today, 10:07am
I think a Christmas OWC is what we all need, any and all Covid-ness banned, scripts so sweet they'll rot your teeth!
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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: Matthew Taylor
Date Posted: Today, 7:43am

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So cool, Matty. Love it. Made me smile.

Hope you'll be in, whatever it is.

All the other comments from you other guys, very funny too.
Looks like gobbledygook to me.


I hope I'll be in. But my workplace is currently crumbling under the Covid pressure and I seem to be spending a lot more time trying to hold it together, on top of the usual run-up-to-Christmas madness!

Maybe a Christmas OWC is just the type of escapism I need
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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: LC
Date Posted: Today, 7:30am
So cool, Matty. Love it. Made me smile.

Hope you'll be in, whatever it is.

All the other comments from you other guys, very funny too.
Looks like gobbledygook to me.
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Dec. OWC!   (reply) Posted by: Matthew Taylor
Date Posted: Today, 6:54am
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Strength of a Soul   (reply) Posted by: BillyJ
Date Posted: Today, 4:22am
Hey again, so on page 21 when you say EXT - HOUSE DAY, I think you should just put in front or backyard there aswell.

I think your flashback around page 25, if you put the flashback and present day like this -
INT. CHURCH (FLASHBACK) - DAY
And the scene heading after that
EXT. CEMETERY (PRESENT) - NIGHT

I've said it before last time and just my opinion, I think that zoe's dialog should be cut a little, like on page 28, Zoe speaks to the bear too much.


On page 32 I din't understand why the nurse was at the beach with colton? but later on in your script I read java jolt coffee, we got none in britain, but then I was like, so is this set in california? New york? came up in jacksonville or somewhere near georg...

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The Monkey's Paw   (reply) Posted by: LC
Date Posted: Today, 2:49am
I recognise the name, Michael.

PM Don, he'll likely have Steven's details.
All else fails:

Steven's on Script Revolution - email or PM there.
https://www.scriptrevolution.com/profiles/steven-sallie

NB: Lesson: Write your contact details on Script title page.
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Honey Mustard - feature   (reply) Posted by: spesh2k
Date Posted: Today, 1:18am

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I think I'm with Dave on Captive Girl.
I keep thinking of the mom and her fliers.

I suppose it depends on her not getting in the way plot-wise and her survival being clever and a surprise -if she were to play dead, perhaps?

Ever since Alien (which made a huge impression on me) slasher/horror movies have become a little predictable with their kill 'em all Final Girl denouements. I'm kinda torn on the other hand though cause the ending of HM is pretty darned effective and satisfying.


Yeah, I'm definitely considering changing that and making her live while also considering adding another 10 pages or so, extending the ending so that there's not another "guy we thought was dead comes out of nowhere...

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The Monkey's Paw   (reply) Posted by: spesh2k
Date Posted: Today, 1:02am
This was a cool take on the classic short story. Really good stuff. Does anyone know if Steven (the author) ever visits the boards? I don't see his email anywhere, I'd like to write up a blog post on this script for the home page.

-- Michael
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Final Imagine/Impact genre revealed...   (reply) Posted by: jwent6688
Date Posted: Yesterday, 10:56pm

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I would love to see your pitch even if it sucked.


Nope. That one stays in the vault.


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I think the reason I never even bothered is because I have never pitched anything and just have no clue how to.  


I'm a terrible sales person.  Would rather hire a pitch man and just remain behind the scenes.


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I entered the first one, pitch was woeful and I got nowhere but fun trying


I'm right with you. Did they even respond to you that you weren't chosen? I heard a lot of people were never notified of anything.

James
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The Monkey's Paw   (reply) Posted by: AnthonyCawood
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:58pm
Always did have a soft spot for the original so thought I'd give this a whirl.

On first page, Mike is described as being in a different room, but by the bottom of the page he seems to be in the kitchen and in the conversation... this is slightly confusing so needs some attention.

"You donít want to be unless." - should that be useless?

Other than that this is a very solid story, loved the twist(s) and the nicely ambiguous ending too.

Good job
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Final Imagine/Impact genre revealed...   (reply) Posted by: AnthonyCawood
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:43pm
Fingers crossed James!

I entered the first one, pitch was woeful and I got nowhere but fun trying
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Honey Mustard - feature   (reply) Posted by: LC
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:39pm
I think I'm with Dave on Captive Girl.
I keep thinking of the mom and her fliers.

I suppose it depends on her not getting in the way plot-wise and her survival being clever and a surprise -if she were to play dead, perhaps?

Ever since Alien (which made a huge impression on me) slasher/horror movies have become a little predictable with their kill 'em all Final Girl denouements. I'm kinda torn on the other hand though cause the ending of HM is pretty darned effective and satisfying.
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Final Imagine/Impact genre revealed...   (reply) Posted by: Grandma Bear
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:34pm

Quoted from AnthonyCawood
It was a little 'involved' Pia... but when else are you gonna get to pitch to Netflix!

I'm lazy...  



Quoted from jwent6688
I entered the female lead thriller. The application was a pain and the 30 second pitch? Worst short film Iíve ever made.  


Good luck James! Let us know how it goes. I would love to see your pitch even if it sucked. I think the reason I never even bothered is because I have never pitched anything and just have no clue how to.  
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