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Homecoming - July OWC   (reply) Posted by: Warren
Date Posted: Today, 1:03am
Thanks for getting this up, Don.
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: Warren
Date Posted: Today, 12:07am
Hi Zack,

Edits as I read and thoughts at the end...

Pg 2


Quoted Text
sons forehead.


son's

Nice to see you using that em dash jump we talked about.

Pg 3


Quoted Text
Authorities say that the
randomness at


Maybe replace "randomness", just reads awkwardly coming from "Authorities".

Pg 8


Quoted Text
AMY
(sarcastic)
Yes sir.


Yes, sir.

I'm up to page 22 and I think you've done a great job already with the relationship between Amy and Brandon. It feels three dimensional.

Pg 26


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CHUCK
(singing)
It ain't no joke, When mama's
handkerchief is soaked, With her tears
because her baby's life has been
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Advice needed: Montage, Dream Seq, Flashbacks...   (reply) Posted by: Warren
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:30pm
For a montage...

EXT. PARK - DAY

Ben and Lisa walk through the lush gardens.

MONTAGE - BEN AND LISA FALL IN LOVE

-- Ben and lisa do this
-- Lisa does this
-- Ben does this

END MONTAGE
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Advice needed: Montage, Dream Seq, Flashbacks...   (reply) Posted by: Warren
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:14pm
Hi Gary,

Take a look at how I handled flashbacks in my most recent script. This is consistent with David Trottier's book, The Screenwriter's Bible as Anthony mentioned, but there are numerous ways to do it. As long as it is clear you can't go wrong.

https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-0721/m-1626803011/
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Bride Out Of Hell   (reply) Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:10pm
Fixed. I re-uploaded everything and flushed the cache.  All the 404s should be cleared.

Don
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Bride Out Of Hell   (reply) Posted by: RodriguezFruitbat
Date Posted: Yesterday, 8:49pm

Quoted from Zack
Getting another error code here.


Thanks for catching that, Zack and LC.

Zack, looking forward to reading your take on TCM  
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Bride Out Of Hell   (reply) Posted by: LC
Date Posted: Yesterday, 8:26pm
Reported the 404.
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Bride Out Of Hell   (reply) Posted by: Zack
Date Posted: Yesterday, 7:58pm
Getting another error code here.
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: Zack
Date Posted: Yesterday, 7:38pm

Quoted from Warren
I should get through it today as well...


You're awesome! Appreciate it, Dude.
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Bride Out Of Hell   (reply) Posted by: RodriguezFruitbat
Date Posted: Yesterday, 7:34pm
Thanks for posting, Don!

This script is probably more comedy than horror, but I hope that whoever reads it has fun either way. Let me know what ya'll think.
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Advice needed: Montage, Dream Seq, Flashbacks...   (reply) Posted by: AnthonyCawood
Date Posted: Yesterday, 7:26pm
Hey Gary

You'll always find contradictory formatting info online as there are no rules as such, so you'll see various answers... key is to make sure it is clear to the reader.

David Trottier's book The Screenwriter's Bible is super useful for these type of questions... check out this article and scroll down the page a little - https://www.keepwriting.com/drformat/2012april.htm

Best
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: Warren
Date Posted: Yesterday, 6:52pm
I should get through it today as well...
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: Zack
Date Posted: Yesterday, 6:32pm

Quoted from James McClung
Reading now. Back with comments when I finish.


Can't wait to hear your thoughts.  
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: James McClung
Date Posted: Yesterday, 6:24pm
Reading now. Back with comments when I finish.
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: Zack
Date Posted: Yesterday, 5:19pm
Thanks, Don.

This is something I've wanted to write for a very long time. If there are any hardcore Texas Chain Saw Massacre fans out there... This one is for you!
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 3:47pm
fixed.
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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre   (reply) Posted by: Zack
Date Posted: Yesterday, 1:01pm
Getting an error code when I try to open this.

Credit to Sean Elwood for the awesome poster!
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Bride Out Of Hell Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 12:22pm
Bride Out Of Hell by Rodriguez Fruitbat - Horror - One week before her wedding, a nervous bride-to-be becomes possessed by a maritime demon and her best-friend tries to help expel the evil spirit before the big day. 101 pages

Contests: Los Angeles International Screenplay Awards Winter 2021 - Quarterfinalist; 13 Horror - Additional Winner - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

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The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 12:17pm
The 1997 Texas Chain Saw Massacre by Zack Akers - Horror - Whilst on a visit to a relative's old house, an innocent family encounters a strange and murderous family from a neighboring property. 82 pages  - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work



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Olympus Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 12:01pm
Olympus by Luke Hancock-Cann - Short, Comedy - The greek gods have lost their status, lost most of their powers and lost their followers. Now they are 'almost' human they need to learn to fit in, as regular people with regular jobs. But are these eccentric characters too obvious, too outrageous or too odd to pass as normal humans? 42 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

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Punk-As-Pookie Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 12:00pm
Punk-As Pookie by Ben Breuer - Series, Comedy - A young girl deals with the blows that life throws at her. - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

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Sadie Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 11:59am
Sadie by Dino Ladki - Short, Drama - After an innocent flirtation with a man in a bookstore, a preternaturally beautiful pre-teen girl is confronted for the first time with a downside to her beauty. 3 pges - pdf format

New writer interested in feedback on this work, please be nice
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Project Greater Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 11:59am
Project Greater by Chilion Thomas - Series, Sci Fi, Fantasy - Two young men seek revenge against an ambitious scientist who's deadly experiment gave them super superpowers. 28 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

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6.S.C Posted by: Don
Date Posted: Yesterday, 11:58am
6.S.C by Bernard Mersier - Horror, Drama - A sin only haunts you if you have conscience. 65 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

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Advice needed: Montage, Dream Seq, Flashbacks...   (reply) Posted by: Zack
Date Posted: Yesterday, 10:47am
If it's a dream sequence or a flashback, include it in that scene's header. Then, once the dream or flashback is completed, you need to make it clear. Example...

EXT. LAKESIDE - DAY - FLASH BACK

John watches as Lisa walks into the water.

She smiles, motions for him to join her.

END FLASHBACK

The key thing is that you make it clear for the reader what is happening.

As for montages, I'm not the guy for that.
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Advice needed: Montage, Dream Seq, Flashbacks... Posted by: Gary Parr
Date Posted: Yesterday, 9:57am
Hi folks,

I was just wondering if anyone could tell me the best way to incorporate montages, dream sequences, and flashbacks into a script.
I'm trying to write some at the moment and I think I'm doing it completely wrong, and the advice I've seen online is really contradictory.

Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks

Gary
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A Slice in Time   (reply) Posted by: Gary Parr
Date Posted: Yesterday, 7:20am

Quoted from Warren
Hi, Gary, this was an entertaining little short and I think it could actually be made on a pretty small budget.

It does need another edit but what you've got works well.


Thanks Warren,

Glad you liked it.

I'll be writing a new draft this weekend to try and improve it.

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A Slice in Time   (reply) Posted by: Gary Parr
Date Posted: Yesterday, 7:19am

Quoted from Zack
You've got quite the imagination, Gary. Very creative. I really like this.

You're writing is much better here than the last script of yours that I read. Still some grammar and punctuation issues, but nothing major. A missing period on page 3 stood out to me.

Short, sweet, and surprisingly dark. My kind of script. Good stuff, Dude.


Thanks Zack,

glad you liked it. And thanks for the feedback. I'll give another edit to fix the issues you mentioned.

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Journal of the Plague Year   (reply) Posted by: Grandma Bear
Date Posted: July 28th, 2021, 7:35pm

Quoted from bert

The virus has a very, very small genome.  If humans are like an encyclopedia, this virus is not even a CVS receipt.  There are very few "variants" it can even form -- it has very few tricks up its genetic sleeve.

This thing could have already been beaten, honestly.  Starved to death months ago.

And I trust you on this. The doctor has spoken.  


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Journal of the Plague Year   (reply) Posted by: Zack
Date Posted: July 28th, 2021, 7:34pm
Wanna know the absolute worst thing about face diapers? You cannot bust a good yodel while wearing one!

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