"Jasper the alcholic gravedigger" I laughed out loud reading that.  This one was really funny.  I love the part of them breaking into the studio and nobody caring to even look up until they shoot off a round.  

Leaving the door to the studio open so everyone can be devoured is a bit of an over reaction on the boys' part. The people are mean yes but helping them be devoured by zombies is a bit much.  I agree with some of the other people that the dialoge at the begining was a bit awkward but it got better as the script went on.

Overall though it was a really fun read.

I absolutely loved the dialogue in the beginning of this!

But later:

When Oswald says, "This filthy drunk is right." I'm wondering why.

And there was no reaction from Jasper afterwards. He just disappeared it seemed.

I think on page 7 the story started to fall apart. I didn't understand the elaborate prank because the shotgun seemed to work as far as I could see. It didn't make any sense then. By the time the priest and his merry followers are trooping up the street, I was lost as to what was going on.

Just work out the story a little more and keep up with the excellent dialogue work.

Sandra