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"Jasper the alcholic gravedigger" I laughed out loud reading that. This one was really funny. I love the part of them breaking into the studio and nobody caring to even look up until they shoot off a round.
Leaving the door to the studio open so everyone can be devoured is a bit of an over reaction on the boys' part. The people are mean yes but helping them be devoured by zombies is a bit much. I agree with some of the other people that the dialoge at the begining was a bit awkward but it got better as the script went on.
I absolutely loved the dialogue in the beginning of this!
But later:
When Oswald says, "This filthy drunk is right." I'm wondering why.
And there was no reaction from Jasper afterwards. He just disappeared it seemed.
I think on page 7 the story started to fall apart. I didn't understand the elaborate prank because the shotgun seemed to work as far as I could see. It didn't make any sense then. By the time the priest and his merry followers are trooping up the street, I was lost as to what was going on.
Just work out the story a little more and keep up with the excellent dialogue work.