I was hearing that this was a good read and it did'nt dissapoint me. i liked the action though you could've given it a little more action but that didn't matter i still liked it you had characters and the story build got me interested more it was funny like starsky and hutch kinda and the beggining was great how it switched back from zen and fury and how they became friends slowly. the ending was weird but good you should make a number two. thanks for making a script as great as this it is a comedy/action script and i hope someday it will become a film hopefully i make it into a film.
great work keep it up

good characters i mean't spelling mistake

Thanks, awk.

May I ask who recommended the script?  Outside of you and tonkatough, I can't think of anyone who genuinely liked the script.

Well, anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it.  I tried to do something a little different than I normally do by writing an action story, and the lack of over the top action was just my way of trying to make it lower budget and easier to film.

Thanks again for your comments.

sorry i can't remember i think i saw it on the discussion board are you making another action script like this one because i'd read it when you finish it. (:

No, no other action scripts in the works at the moment, but I do have an action/horror script called Disposable Heroes that's floating around on here.

I read this last night.  I loved it.  I loved the banter and the childish behavior.  I'm not much on action flicks.  I like very few.  I cracked up on more than one occasion.  I love the dark humor.  Every time someone said Blue Meanies I rolled.  The Blue man killed me too.

I would definitely buy this on DVD and watch it many times over.

I did, from the beginning, think their mother was still alive.  I'm not sure why that is or if I was supposed to feel that way.  I didn't guess anything else.  I just figured Phil wanted the list of people cleaned up fast.

If you don't want us to figure that out first thing, you may wanna change how Zen and Fury react.  I didn't get the feeling that she had really died.

Great stuff Mike.  Do you have any romance scripts on here?  I know you have a lot on here.  Give me a title if you've got one. (O:

~Cindy

Hey Cindy,

Thanks for the read, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.  I still have a few things I want to tweak around with on this, so thanks for the comments about the interaction between Zen/Fury.

I have The Odds of Love and Disparity of Devotion on here, which is basically two differnt versions of the same script with TOoL more romantic and DoD more comedic.

Thanks again.

I'll check them out. Coolio.