Six Hours by Lawrence Gilliam (bigspeed) - Action, Drama - Rick and Rob Belle are brothers who find 10 million in blue diamonds while working on the docks of Philadelphia. They were originally stolen from South Africa by the Russian mob they have six hours to return them. The two brothers stay on edge as it seems everyone in their own little world has eyes for the blue stones, will the brothers survive this dilemma.  59 pages - pdf, format

The concept of "Six Hours", is a good one, and I like the characters, mainly the contrasts between the two brothers. Maybe if it were 40 pages longer, you could have a real movie. How ever, I kind of lost my interest somewhere near page 40, and the ending didnt work for me. It kind of sent the wrong message about stealing. Good work though.

Thanks mgayles i'll think of writing it a little longer but the action scenes i think are well over 30 to 40 minutes all together without the dialog  thanks again for the read,  do you have something you would like me to read let me know.