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Quoted Text INT. KITCHEN - DAY
2003
Valli (mom, 31 year old) is packing lunches. Karthik (dad, 32 years old) is finishing up his breakfast. Kamala (2 years old) is playing with a toy car.
KAMALA Amma, where did I come from. |
When you want to put in a year - you should use a SUPER (as in Superimpose) right after your opening action/description. Trying active by getting rid of the ing words - e.g., rather than "is pacing" - go with packs. telling us they are Mom and Dad is a bit of an unfilmable - we can't see that - let the dialogue do the trick. Always CAP your characters when first intro'd. Add a little more description. Taking this all in - the opening would be something like: INT. KITCHEN - DAY VALLI (31) packs lunches on the counter as KARTHIK (32), finishes up is breakfast at a small dinette. SUPER: 2003 KAMALA (2) plays with a toy car on the kitchen floor. |