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I've been away from this site for quite a while but I'll give this one a crack.
Off the bat, your slug is incorrect. The time parameter is either day or night though I believe you can get away with sunrise/sunset if it's imperative to the timeline. Also the "1980" is best written as a SUPER in a new line.
"We see" and "we hear" is unnecessary as we see and hear everything you describe in your action lines. You'll also want to avoid any camera pans and whatnot as that's best left for the shooting script. Your main concern is in the telling of the story.
The opening scene is a bit thick. You could easily cut this in half and it would still retain the impact you're aiming for.
"CUT-TO" isn't needed.
"...burns dream-like." Not sure what this means.
Same problems with the action lines in the second scene. I recommend steering clear of wrylies in your dialogue. Both of these can be better expressed through action than simply stating their attitudes and fixations.
The "CONTINUE" at the top and bottom of the adjoined pages are unnecessary as well.
That's what I've got for now. Hopefully you'll chime in soon. Good luck with it.
If I were you, I'd change the title, or at least differentiate it from The Conjuring/Annabelle franchise. For example, I wouldn't write a script and then call it Rocky, even if it had nothing to do with boxing.
You probably couldn't afford to fight Warner's legal team. Just my two cents.