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A Good Dad by Joseph Caruso - Drama - A father of 3 kids going through a divorce goes through years of hard financial times and works two bad jobs to support his family. Then something amazing happens to him that changes everything. 89 pages - pdf format
I skimmed the first few pages. The convo between Jack and Molly is good but way too long.
Your slug lines are really interesting. You get the EXT right, but then you give us all this other information that we can't see when we film it. It may be great for you to keep track of what's going on when, but it's so unnecessary.
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That's all we need. Everything else THAT CAN BE FILMED needs to be in the action lines. Why do we need to know she's 5'1? We don't. We don't need hair color. We don't need to know about weight.
Only describe what's pertinent to the story.
I would go over this again with a really tight edit and see how much better it reads.
Oh! Why is there a random second empty page after the title page? Cut that. Not needed.