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AnthonyCawood
Posted: June 18th, 2015, 9:17am Report to Moderator
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Dan - as per Mark's comment... this is purely reality based stuff...

But there's nothing to stop you using the initial idea to generate your own scripts that AREN'T for The Impact.

I plan on re-purposing mine if they are not sucessful... all any of us would need is a framing device to show that there's something about to happen that's gonna kill the world.

Of course I have my fingers crossed I don't need to do that

One final BUT... as I'm not planning on using it... what about a script that has someone who  THINKS they are a superhero, what would they do... see http://reallifesuperheroes.com/


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Yeah, Dan, I kinda have to agree with Mark here and the 'everyday scenario'. However, it doesn't stop you having one of your characters mentally deluded - perhaps believing he has superhero powers i.e., attempt to fly off a high-rise to stop that asteroid. If you juxtapose him with 'normal' people, you could generate some genuine conflict/drama in a two-pager.

See, Anthony just got in before me...  



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Asteroid, silly. :)
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AnthonyCawood
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LOL - greats minds Libby!


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Quoted from Angry Bear


I came up with something great. Well, in my opinion at least, but it involves a mime and his puppet...  


Will the last shot before the meteor hits be a sign that read: "a mime is a terrible thing to waste" ?


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Good to see folk active.

I wonder how useful it is to enter early ? If you have to revise the script it's still tagged with the previous vote and comments.

I think I would rather share here first of all.


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I know you can post upgrades for free, but, why not put them in the works in progress till they are more final?

I have read all 5.

Anthony:  The first one, the 2 pregnant women is a A+  that one really hit me.
Second one was okay ,but, he didn't connect to me.  I am not sure how to fix that one.  

Janet:  The first one (the date) was good, but, the characters don't seem real, or are they just so stunned?  I'd like to see more heart from him to get her up there, and honestly, wouldn't he rather have sex with this girl then get her to the top?

Second story, the Vet, wow, that was touching.  I think she should let them go, and contrast that with insanity and screaming and yelling outside, and have the dogs come peacefully together around her as she cries.  So, the humans are the animals and the dogs are civilized.  

Dustin, I thought it was okay, but, they didn't connect with me.  The junkies felt sad.  I do like it better if they have the drugs and a rich person joins them.  

I don't know how much you guys can change, which is why I'm shocked that you submitted them so quickly.  I mean, can you keep the same title, and radically alter the story?  

I haven't registered yet, but, I plan to and then I will give deeper reviews as I read your latest editions of what you came up with.

The ones I loved:
The pregnant women and the dog story.

good were the other 3, the techie, junkies, and date didn't strike me as great stories to capture emotion.  Just my opinion.

dan


I think it has to be reality based. If you want to go comedy - you go have a Seinfeld - Castanza type argument on which super hero would save the planet  


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wonkavite
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Hey Mark, Dan -

Thanks for the comments on mine!

Dan - re: Caged.  While it would be an interesting satire on humans vs. animals, that just wouldn't be realistic or work for me.  Letting the other dogs out of their cages would result in fights, panic and more... it would just be inhumane.  (You know what dogs are like on the 4th of July?  Just imagine that 5000 times worse!)  The theme of Caged is just that Melanie has nowhere to go. And she wants to spend her last few moments with the animals, and caring for them - doing what she's done all along, as a volunteer...  

Mark - thx re: Top!  You know, I'm a NYCer ...and was only 10 blocks away on 9/11.  But I only just recently saw the Memorial pools for myself.  I can't think of a more fitting place to reflect on the end of the world, and all that potential (and relationships) that *could have been.*

Cheers,

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Dustin
Posted: June 18th, 2015, 11:16am Report to Moderator
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Quoted from AnthonyCawood

I plan on re-purposing mine if they are not sucessful... all any of us would need is a framing device to show that there's something about to happen that's gonna kill the world.


I'm writing mine already including the news so they can stand alone anyway. Never knew I had it in me to write a two-pager.

Here's the second one I wrote, but I haven't uploaded it yet.

http://www.dustinbowcott.com/PDFS/Relationship%20Hangups.pdf

If anyone wants me to host their scripts for this comp while people review them here, I don't mind doing it. I can't give you access to my server, but if you send me the files, I'll upload them and replace as needed.


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AnthonyCawood
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dustin quick comment on the new script...

Currently the order is that he handcuffs himself behind his back, then puts his head through the noose, then tightens it... how does he do the last part with hands cuffed behind his back?

Do like the irony inerent in the predicament, not sure about her saying the 'do everything line'... but it's a comedy so it'll fly...

Nice end!


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Dustin
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I did consider that and was going to write in the action that he pushes against it with his neck but it came out as clunky so I dropped it. I figured the actor would simply push against the noose with his neck as this would tighten it... but perhaps a good work around would be to do the cuffs after tightening the noose with his hands just to be clear. Thanks.


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Dustin
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I didn't bother uploading the relationship one and have written another one instead. We've got to think a little more outside the box. Standard fare isn't going to cut this.

To that end, I've written something a little different, it's called Impactee.

http://theimpact.create50.com/scripts/55831c893838333c0d090000

Log: A radio DJ discovers that there are more than two ways to deal with the impact.


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Dustin

RH..notes

no need to reply, just take and discard, as you like...

FADE IN - im ditching this for this comp, buys me a few lines. 50 kisses was the same

actually not much to offer, although without fade in/out you have a a couple of extra lines, may help

But...rather liked that, my sense of dark humour.

what to suggest?

as i see it the problem we will all face is how to max our scripts as there will be soooo many

may be we need more connection to both of them. set the scene better - memorabilia. etc a life together.

Jane - make her consider and reflect more. i know we don't have much space, but he is a little pantomime at the moment. she could be with someone, say the dork from work, who's the better lover? etc

with a few tweaks this could be strong


My scripts  HERE

The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
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Dustin

read the other one as well, i see you've already posted it.

good finish.

its a bit chatty, but then its only two pages and based around a radio station so what do we expect.

perhaps we could see the others leave, dave alone. he decides to man the radio

actually thats a strong entry


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Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
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Dustin
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Dustin

RH..notes

no need to reply, just take and discard, as you like...

FADE IN - im ditching this for this comp, buys me a few lines. 50 kisses was the same

actually not much to offer, although without fade in/out you have a a couple of extra lines, may help

But...rather liked that, my sense of dark humour.

what to suggest?

as i see it the problem we will all face is how to max our scripts as there will be soooo many

may be we need more connection to both of them. set the scene better - memorabilia. etc a life together.

Jane - make her consider and reflect more. i know we don't have much space, but he is a little pantomime at the moment. she could be with someone, say the dork from work, who's the better lover? etc

with a few tweaks this could be strong


Thanks mate. It's OK. With a few tweaks it'll be mediocre. I don't want mediocre. Waste of my time. It's OK, it's cute... but it's not what I need to win. 50 scripts isn't a lot. Many of the scripts follow the same themes and I noticed lots of the ideas that ran through my mind are already on there. That doesn't mean I can't do it too, my way, but it ain't going to stand out. A script like that just sits with a pile of other similar scripts and then it's lottery time. They can only use one of each kind. Best way to not get put into a pile of similar scripts is to make sure yours stands alone. I know you know this already, you sly old dog. You like to play your cards close to your chest, lol.

If you want to run your script by me in private mate feel free to do so. You've got my email.


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Quoted from Dustin


Thanks mate. It's OK. With a few tweaks it'll be mediocre. I don't want mediocre. Waste of my time. It's OK, it's cute... but it's not what I need to win. 50 scripts isn't a lot. Many of the scripts follow the same themes and I noticed lots of the ideas that ran through my mind are already on there. That doesn't mean I can't do it too, my way, but it ain't going to stand out. A script like that just sits with a pile of other similar scripts and then it's lottery time. They can only use one of each kind. Best way to not get put into a pile of similar scripts is to make sure yours stands alone. I know you know this already, you sly old dog. You like to play your cards close to your chest, lol.

If you want to run your script by me in private mate feel free to do so. You've got my email.


i suppose there will be familiar themes. in fact by others posting we get an idea. but remember they will want some expected idea, just with an extra angle. and they will want some soft edged scripts.

me? i thought i would go serious with the following no hoper

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/32393279/the%20world%20today.pdf

cheers


My scripts  HERE

The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville
Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final
Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards.  Third - Honolulu
Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place
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