As an aside, there's another script I'm considering that also have Jack and Jill as characters.

Saw you were looking for a script.  My script Ringfinger seems to fit the parameters you're looking for :  2 actors, 1 scene, 0 dialogue all in one stuffed page as a few pointed out so more like a page and a half.  Just throwing it out there.  In either case, good luck with it ABSteel.

Is the three-page rule necessary? I have one that's more a psychological thriller (although some people have read it as a comedy. Weirdos), but it's a single character (if you can find someone to accurately portray an 18-year-old), single location (basement), single page. Only sticking point may be a little bit of "adult" content...

Still, if that may pique your interest, let me know.

The assignment calls for a 2-3 minute short inculding credits.

If your one page script has so much slow action that I can make it at least 2 minutes, then I want to read it.

Email me: austinbsteel@yahoo.com

Quoted from bert I read an "urban legend" one a few weeks back. Dad is tucking in the kid at night, the kid is terrified that somebody is under the bed. Dad checks, and under the bed he finds the kid -- the same kid -- terrified that somebody is in his bed. I loved the idea, but the author tried to do to much with it.  It was, like, eight pages. And later I found out it wasn't even original. This could be a great 2-minute film, and with 2 actors and no effects, it practically writes itself.

Looks like someone already did it:

Damn.  That was effective...!  (And well shot, too!!!)  

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Ha.  Primo stuff.

Script written!

LOST & FOUND is about a single gay in the city wanting a little more from a one night stand.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/avif01pm3ez4we1/LOST%20%26%20FOUND.pdf

You shouldn't really have kissing or touching in a short unless you're going to be paying the actors... and an actor's minimum daily rate should be a few hundred dollars. Unless you have two gay friends of course who don't mind kissing each other for free. I found this one out recently with a short I'm making.

Not much of a story either here... more of a scene... but as you aren't being judged on story, it probably doesn't matter.

You do remember this is a student film, right? If anyone is getting paid, they'll be paid in way of lunch and beer. I do have gay friends who will do this without bitching. It's also not much of a kiss.

Here's a slightly revised second draft. I've streamlined the action a bit, but didn't touch the dialogue.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/avif01pm3ez4we1/LOST%20%26%20FOUND.pdf

Thank you for reading it. This script is something I can do with my friends/classmates for free.

Quoted from ABennettWriter You do remember this is a student film, right? If anyone is getting paid, they'll be paid in way of lunch and beer. I do have gay friends who will do this without bitching. It's also not much of a kiss. Here's a slightly revised second draft. I've streamlined the action a bit, but didn't touch the dialogue. https://www.dropbox.com/s/avif01pm3ez4we1/LOST%20%26%20FOUND.pdf Thank you for reading it. This script is something I can do with my friends/classmates for free.

The action was pretty streamlined already. I haven't got any issues with your writing. The story is just a little weak... but if it isn't about story and is just about how you work a camera, lighting and whatever else... then you'll be fine. There's enough in there... with indoor and outdoor scenes...

You're going to need two indoor locations... and do you have liability insurance in the US? It shouldn't be much... but the last thing you need is one of your actors injuring themselves then suing you.

It ain't exactly horror, but story-wise it's not that bad.   One of those "Oh crap moments."   Although I think it'd be better with a male and female.  Best of luck with it.

I didn't say I was going to write a horror. The horror genre got thrown around on Facebook and got stuck.

Quoted from DustinBowcot You're going to need two indoor locations...

Austin could use the same location for Oliver's and Derek's house if he only shows the interior when they're at Oliver's, and only show the exterior when they're at Derek's.  Something hanging on the door at one of the houses would definitely distinguish one from the other.

When Derek leaves Oliver's house, have him walk to the left as Oliver watches him through the gate.  And when Oliver comes to Derek's house, have him walk from the right.  Camera placement should be able to make sure there aren't any overlapping identifying landmarks.

Granted, this all depends on what kind of house Austin has available for the shoot.

The sound of a bus' air brakes and the groan of its engine while Oliver "fingers the address" will help sell the image that Oliver took the bus to get to Dereks.

Derek should say, "Oh.  Thanks." when Oliver gives him the wallet back.  Derek sounds like a dick by just saying, "Thanks."

Story wise, Oliver needs more self respect.  Derek stayed the night at Oliver's, then he lied to Oliver about having to work, then he lied to Oliver about his number, then he accuses Oliver of stalking him, and then he just says 'Thanks' when Oliver returns his wallet.

It would be better if Oliver looks at Derek with contempt when he hands the wallet back, walks away, then Derek offers him a cup of coffee, Oliver turns around and looks at him and says, "I gotta get to work."

As it is right now, I see Oliver as a doormat and I have no respect for him.

Jordan

Thanks for that very in depth review! I do like your ending and I'll see how I can work it in. I've always thought about doing a web series kinda thing, and I think this is a good start.

If I find some actors that are willing to get under the sheets, I'll add the previous night.