Hey George

I just read your script, it was very good indeed with a comedy feel in it. I think it could have turned like Coen movie, where they do the crime, and have some funny characters going through it.

I must confess that i really hate people like Ophelia, it doesnt matter if John did the crime or not, some people should know their place. Well congratulations George you made me hate her.

The formatting was well done, but I'd go for a different ending. Also i think that the script should have more information about John's and Patricia's relationship, because he has to really but really HATE her for shooting her.

So if you think right John says he had been doing this plan for so long, so why should he ruin the plan shooting her when he knew people could hear the sound.

I must confess that i really enjoyed your script, good job!

Regards

Nik