Hello,

I actually really enjoyed this script, even if it isn't completely your idea. There were a few little errors that were easily overlooked, but apart from that, I liked this piece of writing.

A few little errors to point out would be the space before the full stop on the fifth line down and "wine" instead of "whine" - but this could all be avoided by continually reading through your work whilst writing.

Personally, when a character walks into another room or something, I wouldn't use "INT. CORRIDOR - NIGHT" as if it was a new scene; perhaps something like "IN CORRIDOR" would suffice.

I am no expert, so you don't have to take anything I say professionally.

EDIT: I look forward to seeing your next script.

Thanks for the comment Tyler. Glad you liked it. Like you said, reading through the script carefully while writing  could easily eradicate those small mistakes.

Thanks.