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Posted: November 27th, 2012, 2:12pm Report to Moderator
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This Ain't Vegas by Darren J. Seeley - Short - In a mausoleum, five ghouls take the new caretaker hostage during a game of poker. A whole new meaning to a Dead Man's hand.  - pdf, format


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Great premise and the writing isn't bad. I'd work on the dialogue, though. There's some puncuation needed in some of the lines, but over all, I didn't see many mistakes. Good job. It was an enjoyable read.


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