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Look B4 U Leap (currently 1710 views) |
Don |
Posted: September 12th, 2015, 6:31am |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16426 Posts Per Day 1.93 |
Look B4 U Leap by Anthony Cawood - Short, Sci Fi, Comedy - An adventurous couple experiment with time travel using their sheer will to overcome the lack of a time machine, and any scientific knowledge. 5 pages - pdf, format
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MarkRenshaw |
Posted: September 12th, 2015, 1:56pm |
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LocationUK Posts2335 Posts Per Day 0.58 |
An Anthony Cawood script, always a pleasure.
This one read well, as I’ve come to except. Gaz reminded me of The Doctor in a way and the banter between the two characters is good.
There’s not much going on though. This feels just like the very beginning of something. They basically wish themselves to time travel during a leap second. A novel approach. So what next? Where do they go from there? This scene is begging to be turned into a funny time travel adventure.
-Mark |
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vancety |
Posted: September 12th, 2015, 3:21pm |
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LOOK BEER4 YOU U LEAP - ha-ha - Liked it! |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: September 12th, 2015, 5:56pm |
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LocationUK Posts4323 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
Thanks Mark/Vancety Mark - you are spot on, it's the start point... I've got this idea in my head for a series of short time travel comedies, where the time travellers are a bit dim, stumble into things, screw things up etc... almost an anti Dr Who... maybe as a web series. This was my initial piece, so glad you liked. Vancety - Thanks Anthony |
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alffy |
Posted: September 13th, 2015, 1:00pm |
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LocationThe bleak North East, England Posts2187 Posts Per Day 0.33 |
Hey Anthony,
I'm with Mark here, this does seem like it's leading to something bigger.
I enjoyed the dim witted banter between the two characters and the it's a cool idea but I wanted a bit more...
It was decent though. |
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Chase |
Posted: September 13th, 2015, 1:46pm |
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New If nothing goes right, go left.
LocationNew Jersey Posts26 Posts Per Day 0.01 |
New member here.
I kept reading the short over and over because I thought I missed something important like a deep subliminal message or a hidden plot twist.
Ha ha but good read anyway. |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: September 13th, 2015, 2:30pm |
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LocationUK Posts4323 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
Chase/Alffy thanks for reading... Chase, welcome to SS and no there's no deep message, well, apart from that leap seconds and the measurement of time in general is completely a human construct And yes, it's a short short, and as I mentioned... self contained in itself, but potentially the start of a series... see how the muse takes me. Thanks again for the comments Anthony |
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RichardR |
Posted: September 25th, 2015, 9:29am |
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Anthony,
Good work. I'm not sure why the clock keeps working. If they jumped back, then wouldn't the clock join them? And wouldn't they find themselves? But those questions don't pertain to this script. Not needed.
Good job.
Best Richard |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: September 25th, 2015, 1:59pm |
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LocationUK Posts4323 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
Thanks for the read Richard, much appreciated.
Re Clock... hmm, maybe I can switch that up and have it stopped due to their experiment... thanks.
Anthony |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: January 20th, 2016, 7:45pm |
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LocationUK Posts4323 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
Look B 4 U Leap is now optioned. |
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eldave1 |
Posted: January 20th, 2016, 8:45pm |
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LocationSouthern California Posts6874 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
Look B 4 U Leap is now optioned. |
wow - super news |
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DustinBowcot |
Posted: January 21st, 2016, 3:03am |
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Good news, mate. Only just read it now, to be honest. Not much to say on it, but that doesn't matter as it's going to be made anyway. Well written, novel... that's it.
Well done. |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: January 21st, 2016, 5:37am |
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LocationUK Posts4323 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
Thanks mate, just a simple idea that popped in one day... see what they do with it... |
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Grandma Bear |
Posted: January 21st, 2016, 6:24am |
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LocationThe Swamp... Posts7961 Posts Per Day 1.35 |
Congratulations! I'm supposed to read all the posts, but for some reason, I've never heard of this short. Excellent news though! |
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AnthonyCawood |
Posted: January 21st, 2016, 6:34am |
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LocationUK Posts4323 Posts Per Day 1.13 |
Maybe you missed it whilst sunning yourself and drinking beer |
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