SimplyScripts Discussion Board
Blog Home - Produced Movie Script Library - TV Scripts - Unproduced Scripts - Contact - Site Map
ScriptSearch
Welcome, Guest.
It is December 1st, 2021, 3:59pm
Please login or register.
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login
Please do read the guidelines that govern behavior on the discussion board. It will make for a much more pleasant experience for everyone. A word about SimplyScripts and Censorship


Produced Script Database (Updated!)
The scripts of the November OWC are up!


The January Project!
If you want access to the January Project, click here

Short Script of the Day | Featured Script of the Month | Featured Short Scripts Available for Production
Submit Your Script

How do I get my film's link and banner here?
All screenplays on the simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Forum Login
Username: Create a new Account
Password:     Forgot Password

SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board    Unproduced Screenplay Discussion    Short Scripts  ›  I.W.A.S.K. Hercules' Revenge Moderators: bert
Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 6 Guests

 Pages: 1
Recommend Print
  Author    I.W.A.S.K. Hercules' Revenge  (currently 963 views)
Don
Posted: June 23rd, 2016, 4:07pm Report to Moderator
Administrator
Administrator


So, what are you writing?

Location
Virginia
Posts
15021
Posts Per Day
1.97
I.W.A.S.K. Hercules' Revenge by Buck Biestek - Short, Comedy - What do you do when you escape the electric chair? You seek REVENGE! 27 pages - pdf, format


Visit SimplyScripts.com for what is new on the site.

-------------
You will miss 100% of the shots you don't take.
- Wayne Gretzky
Logged
Site Private Message
Nolan
Posted: June 23rd, 2016, 4:49pm Report to Moderator
New


Posts
178
Posts Per Day
0.08
I got to page 12 before I had to call it quits.  

**spoilers, kind of**
The dialogue doesn't seem natural at all and the use of capitalization on almost every second word was starting to get annoying.  Surely everything can't be that important to the script that it needs to be capitalized.  For instance "Stanley Stinkles STANDS steady".  Does that really need to be capitalized?  There are a load of others all over the script.  

The use of "we see" also pops up a lot.  Think about it for a minute.  Of course "we see" it, it will be right there on the screen.  There's no need for "we see".  It just starts to get annoying after a while.

That's only a few things.

I didn't get to the end so I'm not sure what happened, but with the way things were going, I'm not too sure if it was going to be good.
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 1 - 2
RichardR
Posted: June 28th, 2016, 2:24pm Report to Moderator
Been Around


Posts
899
Posts Per Day
0.35
Buck,

I tried this, but I couldn't get through it.  Reads like a graphic novel without the pics.  Sorry.

Best
Richard
Logged Offline
Private Message Reply: 2 - 2
 Pages: 1
Recommend Print

Locked Board Board Index    Short Scripts  [ previous | next ] Switch to:
Was Portal Recent Posts Home Help Calendar Search Register Login

Forum Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post polls
You may not post attachments
HTML is on
Blah Code is on
Smilies are on


Powered by E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006