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Gastown by Jay Fjestad - Short, Action, Adventure - Janet and her mom, Karen, are out on a quick shopping trip when a desperate, cryptic phone call sends them on a chaotic chase through the streets of downtown San Diego. 23 pages - pdf format
I'm not quite sure what led to them being chased or how Dad is linked. I like your writing style, but just be careful, sometimes leaving out words can make it difficult to follow who is doing what. I wasn't quite sure how to visualize the pedestrians. Are they in a zombie-like state? At page 5 I was thinking this is pretty slow for Action, and then it just shifted into full on action. Just be careful of too much repetition. The cars bounce and jump a lot. There's also a lot of going fast, then having to slow for people, then fast and then slow again. This would be a pretty high budget short to make. Regards, Christine