Hello to you both
You went a bit overboard with the O.S sounds. It's a small style choice I guess, but they became irksome.
You give us the location of the sound, and that it is O.S - given the location is not the current location, it's too much IMHO.
"SMASH of glass from the kitchen..." OR
"SMASH of glass O.S..."
I'd pick one, not both.
The story was a bit "meh" - It's a punchline comedy but the punchline is predictable and not entirely funny.
Being high doesn't really play into the story at all - could have played out the same if she was sober, so I would revisit how being high can complicate the story and take it in some funny directions.
There are no real consequences - the cops show up but are convinced quickly and easily that nothing untoward is going on and they leave. Nick also recovers from being unconscious quickly with nothing more than a sore head.
I think you could revisit and pump up the comedy in this - a comedy of errors - Nick is still unconscious for example when the police arrive, attempt to arrest Trudy thinking she is the burgular and (being high) leads them on a chase around the house.
as it is, I don't think this stands out very much.
But hopefully I am wrong and someone loves it and films it
Best of luck to you