Hey Ronald,
You reeled me in with the title and log line but unfortunately the script itself didn’t work for me.
Perhaps it went over my head I don’t know, but as I was reading it I had no idea why you called the guy Alexander the Great, unless I’m missing something obvious (which is a very real possibility), and I the narration felt way too wordy for me. Quite a few times I found myself wondering what are we meant to be seeing whilst the narrator is waffling away?
That said, I dig the concept and think if it was tightened up it’d make for a great little short.
Anyways good luck with it.
Cheers |