Winnie's Memorial by John Stone - Short, Comedy, Political Satire - Winnie is concerned by the arrival of a new statue. 3 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

This is a lot of work to say that Churchill was racist.

As far as the writing goes it's pretty clean, but...

(Pervicacious) ?

This wouldn't be my first choice.
And as far as the wrylies go, this is one I'd omit because it's not needed.
You already paint the tone that he's irritated with Mandela's presence.

I'd remove the line where Abe says "So, what of it?". That way the only words Abe ever says are "Beats me."

You labeled this as satire, so I'll take it for what it is, but it didn't ring any bells for me.

-Jordan

Hi and thanks for your quick review.

Agree pervicacious may not be needed.

The whole point of the short is that Churchill doesn't know who the statue is s'posed to be of, and that he commands the square. However, the square is decorated with liberators.

In regards to your disposition with satire, the scripts is 100 per cent satire.

Thanks for your review.

BTW CHURCHILL WAS NOT A RACIST!