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Lifestyles of the Rich and Poor by Skip Byrd - Short, Dramedy - A antisocial personality disorder diagnosed young man overcomes his fear by having life planned out for him as he deals with friends and family. 13 pages - pdf, format
- The FADE IN comes first. - The scene heading is not formatted correctly. Should be: INT. TORONTO - NIGHT - How is "Toronto" an interior location??????
Freddie is in the hospital for treatment and
Dr. Pearlstein is having a conversation with him.
There is a blank line in the middle of this sentence. Freddie should be CAPPED as well as Dr. Pearlstein. All character names are CAPPED when first intro'd. Also some description of the characters certainly would be helpful.
No need to number scenes.
Okay - I'm going to stop. There are issues throughout. I don't mean to be harsh, but you need to learn some of the basics.
This one needs work. The English is flawed, and the story meanders without real purpose. The characters need to be fleshed out and given more motives. There really isn't a story her, just some scenes and dialogue meant to be provocative. Keep reading good scripts.
'Freddie headbutts him, throws the table and punches him in the face three times.' I thought that was a bit extreme and it came out of nowhere. The doctor didn't react much at all to that. 'Thank you for your help, it means a lot to me'? That was quick change in mood. Freddy doesn't sound like the kind of person who gets embarrassed. Your story lacks structure, and it kind of ends for no reason.