Quoted from rc1107 Don't wish about a thumbs up emoji, steven8. Steven A. Clark is not actually cool with you. He's just talking shit. I know because we've been friends on FB for 11 years and 2 days. He actually said you're the fourth best 'Steven' on the site, and that's only because the other 4 are spelled with a 'ph'. He told me that's why your name's steven8. Not trying to cause drama or anything...

See, this is what happens when you unknowingly befriend Ohioans, then spurn their repeated sexual advances.

Quoted from SAC See, this is what happens when you unknowingly befriend Ohioans, then spurn their repeated sexual advances.

Especially those guys in Youngstown.  They're all in the Mafia, you know.

Ahoy, Steven,

Nothing I can really point out to critique. Does a good job setting up everything. Not quite sure how hooked I'd be without the twist. That aside, dug the premise. Not sure how original it is, but, hey, it's all in the execution anywaz. Enjoyed the dialogue. Definitely would be easy to film.

Sorry, no substantive comments. Best of Irish luck with it. -A

Quoted from ghost and_ghostie gal Ahoy, Steven, Nothing I can really point out to critique. Does a good job setting up everything. Not quite sure how hooked I'd be without the twist. That aside, dug the premise. Not sure how original it is, but, hey, it's all in the execution anywaz. Enjoyed the dialogue. Definitely would be easy to film. Sorry, no substantive comments. Best of Irish luck with it. -A

Andrea,

Thanks for checking this out. Exactly on the twist. Not every story needs one but it sure helps. Glad you mentioned the dialogue. That’s one thing I’ve been aware of that I need to punch up and make character-specific. Another trusted writer recently told me that some of my characters sound the same regarding dialogue, so adding in little nuances goes a long way to making a better script.

Thanks again!

Steve