I like the story and the dialogue, but to me works much better in the short story format (in a book) where you can explore more of the protagonist thinking, and not like a short film, where sincerely is a story very difficult to pull it out, because the technical issues. Maybe with CGI, but you have a lot of effect that, if there are not doing in the right way, could be distracting from the story.
Again, great script and I enjoy reading about it, but even it's cinematic (from a visual perspective) I feel it's hard to make it a short film.
Great job, keep the good work! |