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First act - The capture of John Curry and the transfer to Winterhaven, and the introduction to everyone.

Second act - Revealing that Ardell used to live near there, family murdered and murder never found. The snooping around by Rollins takes place with the aid of Montgomery and his deputy.

Third act - We learn that Montgomery was the murderer. We find this out by Ardell watching Montgomery kill a man. Then we go to the flashback of the murder.

I'll consolidate the flashbacks and scratch any backstory that I gave to Montgomery. The focus will be on the investigation and the only backstory of Montgomery will be his fake name that he used while being rehabilitated by Lucy.


Good, the only changes I would make is this:

It would be more believable for Ardell to do the snooping around since he has a personal interest in the case -it gets him into the much needed conflict with Rollins who sees the case as a distraction.  

Montgomery on the other hand is more sympathetic to Ardell�s quest for justice and goes behind Rollins back to offer him support.  


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I could have Ardell introducing the idea to investigate, and they both do it. I don't want any conflict between the two marshals. I also don't want to have any suspicion on Montgomery's part. I want him to have the appearance of helping, but intentionally suggesting someone else as the culprit.

I don't know, I'm not at that part yet. I'm still getting Rollins and Ardell to town. I'm still thinking of a way to have Ardell bring up his troubled past as well.
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I want Montgomery to have the appearance of helping, but intentionally suggesting someone else as the culprit.


The Fugitive is a good story to study on how to pull that off!


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I don't know, I'm not at that part yet. I'm still getting Rollins and Ardell to town. I'm still thinking of a way to have Ardell bring up his troubled past as well.


It has to be a momento of vulnerability - in which he lets his guard down.  It needs to be with someone he trusts - either a lover or a friend.
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True, it will be revealed to Rollins. I'll work on why he explains that part of his past.
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Reworked a lot of it, here are the first 45 pages.


https://drive.google.com/open?id=1aukISRLODIvphdSeh3m5UX9nWobc4KOj
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