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An Idiot's Guide To Life (Film Number One) by The Goose - Comedy, Sci Fi, Horror, Romance, Adventure, Drama - This is the first in a massive batch of "Idiot's Guide" films, each film contains a few shorts on all sorts of things, some deal with the paranormal and the unexplained, some with love, life and sport and others are just, well, weird... - rtf, format
"A good script is never rejected because of layout or lack of technical jargon. If people like it, then any experienced film or TV PA or secretary can lay it out in professional manner and add all the technical terms necessary"
-- Ronald Wolfe "Writing Comedy"
"We don't make movies for critics, since they don't pay to see them anyhow."
AN IDIOT'S GUIDE TO TIME TRAVEL AN IDIOT'S GUIDE TO GETTING LAID ON YOUR FIRST DATE AN IDIOT'S GUIDE TO ANNOYING THE DEAD and AN IDIOT'S GUIDE TO HITCHHIKERS
Actor trying to write...
"A good script is never rejected because of layout or lack of technical jargon. If people like it, then any experienced film or TV PA or secretary can lay it out in professional manner and add all the technical terms necessary"
-- Ronald Wolfe "Writing Comedy"
"We don't make movies for critics, since they don't pay to see them anyhow."
I started reading this script and finished the time travel story. I'm under the impression that this is your first draft. You had about ten pages of idle conversation before you even got to the time travel machine, which is wrong. If you don't catch the reader/viwer right away, you lose them.
Your dialogue seems to be too on the nose, especially Jane's speech on responsibility on (about) page five.
You narrative often too descriptive. I'd cut it back.