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Blood and Dust by Ryan Lee, Cameron Mitchell, James Williams (Ryan1, Cam17, jwent668 - Short, Horror - When a vengeful gypsy summons his unearthly powers, the tiny wild west town of Bannon, Arizona is in for one hell of a night. A SimplyScripts collaborative screenplay. 14 pages. - pdf, format
Thanks for the read. Yeah, the formatting is a bit off in this one because my Final Draft wouldn't let me paste in the pages from the thread. I had to paste it in Word and re-format it.
Good catch on that one line. Always looking for a way to cut down on wordage. Glad you liked it.
Thanks for the read. Yeah, the formatting is a bit off in this one because my Final Draft wouldn't let me paste in the pages from the thread. I had to paste it in Word and re-format it.
Good catch on that one line. Always looking for a way to cut down on wordage. Glad you liked it.
...and that was about the only gripe I could come up with. Pretty entertaining stuff, nice and gory. I'm sure y'all already thought about it, but since the reward was for Jesse 'dead or alive' couldn't you have him get infected, then still turned over to the marshalls for the reward? maybe he gets bitten right before the second dust, so he turns after everyone else is dead? Course you would have to make the sheriff more of the main character, but the whole badass stranger deal doesn't really do all that much in such a short story. Just a thought.
Good job yall though
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Good catch on the one-horse town. Looks like I forgot to include a word there. The way the story played out, there was no one particular hero, just the Sheriff and Outlaw who have to work together to save their arses. Then they go their seperate ways. Thanks for your suggestion, though.
Yea, I know what you mean, just if there is no planned sequel/expansion then having all the characters just continue on with their lives separate seems a little unfinished.
I just have the image of the sheriff turning up at the marshalls office with jesse, holding the poster that says dead or alive, then the marshalls look up and jesses got old school handcuffs, and the empty vacant face of a zombie. Just as a final punch at the end of the script.
As I said I liked it, impressive three people managed to work together and get that out. Take care.
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Zombies! Zombies! Zombies! Everybody wants to write about zombies... okay fair enough. Ain't too many people jumping up and down to read this one and they should be with some of the recent lackluster shorts, so I thought I'd put some life back into this one.
So this is what we got here...
The 1968 classic, "Night Of The Living Dead," transported back in time to 1868 with the collaborative efforts spin on things. Is this it? I remember when I first seen that movie, scared me shitless. Now when I see it, I just roll my eyes, laugh. Nothing but cheesy fun.
Spoilers!!!
So we have this "Mystic Healer" who rides into town to help a sick little boy. Reminds me of a song by Tanya Tucker; "Lizzie And the Rainman." You came riding in on the sunrise on a hot west Texas day, with a fancy man in a painted wagon with some fancy things to say. Looks like you folks need some water, well water is my game and for the small price of $100.00, I bet you I could make it rain." I love that woman and her music. Seen her three times in concert.
But In this case it was like $3.00. The Sheriff say's hell no and kicks Zanter out of town. So he rides off, heads out to the cemetery, pulls out some "Pixie Dust." Well, that's what I'll call it. Conjure up all these dead people and they reek havoc on this one-horse-town. Do I have this right??? The blood and gore starts and the bullets fly. Eventually, "the" three escape the saloon, lock themselves up inside the jail like caged animals. Down to their last bullets, when Zanter re-appears and will make it all go away, if they just pay the man. Does this sum things up? Okay, fair enough.
Overall...
I tend to stay away from scripts dealing with zombies. I hate them... and equally hated them in this one too.
But... I liked it for these reasons...
1) It's nice to read a script that's almost error free.
2), I like George A. Romero as a director. He's done mostly good work in his career.
3), I love a good western, unfortunately, it's not a very popular genre around here.
4), when it comes to horror, I prefer blood, guts, and gore. And this had a lot of that going on. Very visual too. Some very good dialogue as well. I try not to read too much into shorts... because that's exactly what they are, the start of something bigger. This could definitely be expanding into a feature for sure.
So for the collaborative effort here... I have to admit, I did enjoy this, so my hats off to you.
Thanks for the read. Any and all are appreciated. I think the wheels have just about fallen off the zombie bandwagon, and we wanted to get our two cents in before that ride comes to a complete stop. It's hard to get scares out of zombies now, because the genre has been so done to death in recent years it's almost like self-parody. Also, very hard to write good dialogue for zombies. "Brains." "Glahrr." Etc. Try table reading that.
So, we approached this with a sense of humor. Glad you enjoyed it. As for expanding it to a feature, sure. The western/zombie genre is alive and well, as evidenced by the box office triumph of Jonah Hex. Or maybe not.
Of all the collaborations I've read on the site, this one's the most consistent. It's a pretty effective mash up, but the premise failed for me. A gypsy healer condemns an entire town for three bucks? Every gypsy curse I've seen or read is always announced. They want the offending party to know and suffer for what they did. It's not much of a curse if no one in town knows why it's happening. The mother even tried to pay him, so it's the Sheriff's doing. I don't see why Jesse had to be an outlaw stranger passing through. It doesn't add anything to the plot as far as I can tell. I like the guy sleeping on his wife's grave, nice bit of business there.
This would have had a much more personal feel if the boy's father declined to pay. Mom's about to pay the gypsy and angry farmer dad comes in and blocks the deal. Angry dad injures the gypsy and throws him out of town. Bam. Curse. The Sheriff tries to play the fair card but the father isn't having it. And the father suffers as he watches his family zombified, etc. Now that's a revenge tale I can get behind. Then the Sheriff is your main gun and the father has to face the music.
The action set pieces are very compelling. Some real fine work. However, they are undermined by an completely unconvincing set up.
With some tweaking and some real gypsy hocus pocus, this could seriously rawk.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing and rewriting! I'm glad this got a script of the day nod.
Regards, E.D.
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Thanks for the read. Ryan handles the comments on this one. He'll get back to you. You have some points. Cameron is barely here anymore. Shame. He had some writing chops. I'm gonna Email him about this OWC.
Well, I'm a big fan of westerns. It's a shame more aren't made. I liked this one. The old west and Zombies are a great combination. I think the script was well written, the characters had cool names, the concept of the story was neat, and the dialogue was good. I enjoyed it.
If you can't beat 'em, then get yourself a bigger stick! John Mavity