Crikey, John C! What a tone to take with someone.
Amusingly enough, it seems you were wrong.
Anyway, this was a good demo of your dialogue skills and it was a complete enough story that takes a dim view of human behaviour. This would actually probably work quite well as a radio skit.
Particularly liked this: Fuck E.T. What kind of man pokes you in the eye? Dirty
What I liked in this case was actually something that dragged down the script - it's reliance on profanities. I think the script would benefit immensely if you chose more elegant ways of expressing the fucks, dickheads, etc. From what I can tell, you're certainly capable of being more creative, as your skills with dialogue seem sharp.
Not bad and I even took it "seriously".