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I like the scenario, but I couldn't finish due to basic English errors and the density. It's more like a short story than a screenplay in large chinks.
Anyway, you really need to proofread or you'll piss people off. If you want them to take the time to read and comment, you need to take the time to clean up the little mistakes. On the 1st page alone I grabbed these problems:
* "All signs of life cease to exist." (there were signs, and they suddenly ceased?) - There are no signs of life. * "...carrying the rainstorms water towards and off beat path..." - an off-beat * "It piers out..." - peers * "the rips and tares" - tears
You've also got lots of problems with things like 'their - there - they're" and "its - it's" and apostrophes. Pay me $5/page and I'll be happy to clean that shit up for you (I did most of the 1st page already for free).
Other than the English stuff:
I couldn't figure out why the ranger would leave his family in the wagon and go off into the darkness. Why didn't he stay and protect them at the wagon? Seems like a hockey goalie going out to center ice to get the puck. He loses my sympathy for this move. He needs a better reason, like maybe something was left behind, or a human voice cries for help.
You kind of lost me after that, but I tried.
I was going to buy a copy of The Power of Positive Thinking, but then I thought: What the hell good would that do? -Ronnie Shakes
Reads like you sat down; ohhhhhh, around October, and played copious amounts of Red Dead Redemption's absurdly overpriced Zombie DLC to me. Then quickly jotted this one down in a memory serves kind of way.
Pretty ballsy passing this off as your own. Wait, what am I saying? Rockstar should be sued for plagiarism themselves for all the content they've stolen, borrowed and absorbed without permission other than the claim of "Oh, it's in homage to."
So, other than a weak story, tripe dialogue and too much exposition you should be fine. And if Rockstar would come knocking at your door just tell them your script was "In Homage to."