The Bay by Robert Skotte (sniper) - Horror - In a world ravaged by the walking dead, the safest place for man is among the dangerous men on the planet - Pelican Bay State Prison. 121 pages - pdf, format

Just read this.

It's a decent read, nothing too new on the zombie genre but then it's hard to actually find something new I suppose considering everythings been done before, especially with regards to zombies.

A lot of good action imagery, sometimes the writing needs to be "tightened" a little. Hard to explain if you're interested/use this site I'd be happy to provide an example.

Characters were all good, however it would have been nice to have a bit more of a description other than just 20s or 40s. But for the main characters there was enough so I suppose it works out.

Got to say, I lost interest after DeShawn died, not because he was such an amazing character or anything so to speak - but I like it in a piece when a few of the co-stars make it out too, his death was just predictable that's all he coulda been saved!

Hey Mother Goose,

This is an old script that had been posted before a couple of years and I wasn't really looking for feedback on it but thanks for the read and giving me your 2 cents.

I basically agree with everything you say and were I to write the same script today, which I'm not, it definitely wouldn't look like this.

Cheers
Rob