A Peeling by Steve Burton (SBurton) - Romcom - A female artist asks a male photographer to pose nude for her project, which triggers other uptight challenges before he decides to pose. Layers peel off to reveal the true self. 89 pages - pdf format

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Steve - this is a nice premise, for a short, but it just doesn't have the legs for an interesting feature. Also, your logline doesn't do the concept any favours.

Your opening slug needs addressing.

Your opening pages had alot of formatting issues that need addressing and really slow down the read. I'm guessing this is a first crack at a screenplay?

You haven't introduced your characters. Use guy use MAN & WOMAN. 2 pages later they are given names, TOM and JENNY? Why have you spaced all your description lines out into one line action sequences? It's as if your trying to force your story out to over 90 pages.

Some of your descriptions are passive and don't really make much sense. EG:
'his pants get unzipped and then he pisses on the sand'. How do his pants get unzipped? Tom, unzips his pants, they don't unzip themselves.

It looks as if the formatting of your dialouge is also off. Perhaps try a free screenwriting software program like Celtx.

The dialouge between Jenny and Tom in the first 6 pages is very unnatural and afr too on the nose.

I don't understand your use of 'following' in your slugs. The general format is INT. or EXT. - LOCATION - Time of day, usuallly DAY or NIGHT

I recommend you read some scripts here and get a handle on format and then revisit your script.

I have agree with Eoin on a few points.... The storyline was very simple, with not much to grab me,  by page 30 I was getting a little bored(sorry) just my opinon..
I also had no idea what ` following` was...... You had wayyy too many slugs, just in page 24 alone, you can avoid all that, we know you are in the bar and until you exit the bar all the INT. following, is not needed.  You can use mini slugs.. like Bar Area or Bar Entrance, or use your description/action lines better, so it`s more free flowing.
On the plus I got a few laughs, I liked Richard`s character.
Just be a little bit more creative and  as Eoin stated read some scripts...Everyone is always eager to get their first screenplay out and you miss alot of mistakes, especially if you try and proofread your own...I know I did with mine..
Good Luck Steve and stick with it.