Castle for Keeps by David Whitehead - Action, Adventure - Two American teenagers have to fight for their life when they ceoss swords with an English army officer. 111 pages - pdf, format

David, you just can't have a typo in your logline.  It's such a huge red flag warning us of exactly what's to follow.

Take pride in your work and don't post anything that's rushed and hasn't been checked dozens of times.  Just not cool and not doing yourself any favors.

And for those of us who don't take warning... we wade on it.

Much to our regret.

I really can't believe you have read anything substantial about screenwriting - 'least not retained it.

In the first 10 pages, we spend about 2.5 pages on a train... having a coffee, slowly stopping and... getting our cases and... getting off.

Matt's sons sleep during most of the train journey. Most readers will be joining them.