NICK We’re going to get that cow back sir.
Edge of the seat stuff, indeed!
I never understand people who go to all the effort of committing to 100 pages, without knowing what they are doing.
The slugs are so wildly off, you can't have looked into how to write scripts properly.
Get some shorts up, get some criticism, and then get better.
This, as it stands, will get you no-where. |