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Posted: August 4th, 2012, 9:08pm Report to Moderator
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It's Always Sunny in Philadelphia "The Gang Catches Predators" by Colin O'Brien (gridlockd) - Series - In an effort to revive their favorite cancelled television show, the gang takes it upon themselves to lure, confront and ultimately, tackle, internet sexual predators. 31 pages - pdf, format


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This.... was pretty damn funny. I've only seen IASIP a handful of times, but I get how the show works, and its funny.

The dialogue seemed spot on to me, except with Dee. I'e always seen her defend herself better than what she does here.

Act I seemed a little long as well, taking up 2/3 of the script, though I don't know if those are the normal breaks for the show.

I would try re-working the high-five part, perhaps making it shorter for other things to be reworked, like Dee's part.

Great script though, hilarious stuff.


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Thanks for the review, man!

I was on the verge of cutting the 'hands in' thing the whole time I was writing but then it ended up paying off so nicely that I had to keep it. I know it's a lot of back and forth but I think it's better said than read. In fact, that gives me an idea. I should use that "dual dialouge" function in the Final Draft. Perfect excuse to use that.

Also thanks to Don/Administrator for posting it here.

Might as well thank the academy to while I'm at it. Might save time later. Thanks in advance, guys. Kids, if you're reading this; Go to bed!



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