Opened this up out of curiosity to see what Rolo was talking about.
And yes, there are definitely problems. Your script should begin on its own page, not directly under the copyright info. Your opening action descriptions are way too long and tedious. And -- your text is justified! Never justify your text in a script.
Now maybe you're getting to know some new software or something like that, but you need to correct that.
Other than that, like Rolo said, read a few scripts around here and you'll be able to have a clearer idea of formatting and stuff like that. Any help you may need, feel free to reach out. I, and I'm sure many others round here, will be happy to help out.
Best of luck,