Baby Blue? Ain't that the song playing in Departed when Leo shoots that guy in the knee?
Anyway, on with the script, Lots of camera directions going on here, and while I don't mind them if they're needed -- sparingly of course -- they're really not needed here. A Close up of your character eating a pizza or doing this or that can be deleted, save space, and give more room for other stuff.
As for story and what not, George is a pretty mean fucking jerk-off. I have to say that. He is a truly slimy guy. He comes across as a dude you just want to slap in the face. Your dialogue is very on the nose but I found myself getting emotional anyway. Made me wonder what Rachel ever saw in this guy... and how she even became pregnant by him. While you DID get me to FEEL SOMETHING in this scene, which is great, I think it comes out of nowhere. I think you need to lead in to it better instead of just having George being the outright, outspoken asshole that he is. Same with the rest of the script. Things happen slam bang fast. Learn to ease in to things a bit.