The Asset by Steve Meredith - Short, Drama - Chris, a former U.S. Army Ranger, is having trouble adjusting back to civilian life.  Then one day, an unconventional job offer comes his way. 12 pages - pdf, format

Hi Steve - a few thoughts just my opinion of course

1) You introduce characters in the right way with capitalised names for the first appearance... bit you don't tell us anything about them from a descriptive point of view. So beyond male and female we know nothing about the leads.
2) Parantheticals are used to convey how something is said, but you've used them for action
e.g. (standing up, and extending her hand)... this should be an action line.
3) The discussion between Jennifer and Chris is way too wordy same again later with Steven. Remember 'show don't tell' with a screenplay.
4) I'm not sure it's you or the software you are using but character names for dialogue don't need the : at the end of them so
CHRIS:
should be just
CHRIS
5) There's a few typo's and grammar issues that should be fixed. E.g. psycologist is used a couple of times, when it should be psychologist.
6) Be careful for passive action lines, e.g. Chris is breathing heavily now, should be Chris breathes heavily. etc.

Anyway all of the above cn be fixed and reading other people's scripts will give you a better feel for how they should be constructed and flow.

So onto the story.

Well I definitely wanted to see why Steven wanted to test him and what offer he had for Chris, but the reveal seemed a little obvious.

I was hoping for a bigger twist, something less linear - maybe something that tied into his missing 36 hours on the previous mission and/or his dreams.

Good luck with it.

Anthony