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Tide Flash by Steven Burton - Short, Sci Fi, Fantasy - Charles has writer's block, a rip tide threatens his life, and then he discovers inspiration from a teen who shares a story. 10 pages - pdf format
We start with the ocean and these groups on the beach. Why? These people won't come up again. The story starts with Charles and his wife.
He alters his business cards and puts them in his backpack why? I know it's a convenient way to connect with Johnny, but you can't make Charles do stupid things to further your story. He has no reason to take the cards. Now, if he has an old one from before, and Johnny steals it along with a bottle of water, then, you have something that works. Of course, Johnny won't have the right number, but you can figure out a way around that. Make this difficult for both of them.
And the rip tide takes both of them, and I'll buy that. But the dialogue doesn't work for me. And then, Johnny discovers his talent for storytelling. I don't think it works that way, but that's me. Charles' revelation in the water seems a bit too handy also.
The formatting needs work also. You don't double space dialogue. I think you should read many good scripts and discover how they're formatted and written.