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It's relatively well written with a few typos and grammar issues.
un-cat-eristic? Really? So cringe worthy.
Some parts of this make no sence to me. Why rob the place and instantly want to give it back, yes you have a reason but it doesn't work for me.
Two occasions where two characters literally say exactly the same thing at the same time. Seriously when does that ever happen with more than just a word or two.
The ending was completely out of left field. Without any actual reason for that to happen, it didn't make much sense to me. Also, who after finding such a horrific scene would be calm enough to feed and water the cat?
I think there could be something here, it just needs a lot of work.
I think you need a better setup for this one. Why do the tweens need the money, and why can't they get it in some other way? Without that, the tweeens are criminals and who cares about them? We do care about Mrs. Hanes, although maybe we shouldn't since the money appears not hers to begin with. This story screams for more. A better start for the tweens and then some further jeopardy when Mrs. Hanes remembers that two girls did a survey, but she remembers that it's never two but three....