a lot of confusing writing.
missing voice over tags or the protagonist was talking to himself?
wrong slug lines. Some int. that should be ext.
During the big scene with all the women talking you forgot to tell us who these women are. Who is Becky? Is she young, old, hot, ugly? Oh and Stacey is there ... you might want to mention that, seeing as how she is the titular character.
This is all the first 15 pages tho. Haven't read the rest but I have a feeling where it's going. The Graduate *cough*