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A Soul's Plea For Help by Gerasimos Rozis - Sci Fi - An encrypted otherworldly signal coming over a Mars rover is sent to a high-tech company with a questionable agenda to be deciphered. However little do they know about their involvement being orchestrated by their own music-loving creation, planning to steal from them what is not meant to be stolen.  115 pages - pdf format

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An otherworldly individual hacks into the Opportunity rover on Mars, and sends an encrypted message to Earth, well hidden inside a song.
Considering that the rover is actually a dead stick, NASA assigns the transmission's analysis and deciphering to one of its best private contractors, Atkinson Corp, a state of the art company with unlimited resources and power, a company of unrivaled expertise in AI development and computer coding, but also highly questionable tactics and an evil agenda surrounded by cyborg organisms.
While the processing of the message creates more questions than answers, the prospect of the message itself being alien, grows strong into Atkinson who wants to be the first communicating with the strangers, disregarding the Government's interests.
However, little does he know about the single individual who devised and executed such a plan, just to hack into that specific company for his own benefit, that includes access to the AI research department, which was out of his reach up until the moment Atkinson decided to speed the deciphering up.
When the time comes, Atkinson Corp itself is hacked and its most precious artifact, an actual young female AI, is the real target.
With a facility infested by an army of guards and security beyond imagination, one man has to go in, two people have to come out, and three to make it home safe.

This belongs to the Scifi section, not here. Don't know if that was my mistake, please move it there! Ty!


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Hey... I read your script.... I must say you have it action packed.  I saw you had on the discussion board about writing your logline. I gave it a go. Of course itís just my opinion ,so donít think Iím saying yours is bad and I think mines good. Just throwing it out there for you.

When NASA intercepts an encrypted message sent from the ill stricken Mars rover Opportunity,  they send it for decoding to the tech conglomerate, Atkinson Corporation . Atkinson having their own hidden agenda  ,donít realize the source of the signal is orchestrating a plan through the use of music, to take possession of an item they both equally lay claim.

Before I go on with the feedback. I just want to make sure you are okay with a newbie like me; or are you wanting a more seasoned set of eyes to look it over.?

Thanks !



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Hey... I read your script.... I must say you have it action packed.  I saw you had on the discussion board about writing your logline. I gave it a go. Of course itís just my opinion ,so donít think Iím saying yours is bad and I think mines good. Just throwing it out there for you.

When NASA intercepts an encrypted message sent from the ill stricken Mars rover Opportunity,  they send it for decoding to the tech conglomerate, Atkinson Corporation . Atkinson having their own hidden agenda  ,donít realize the source of the signal is orchestrating a plan through the use of music, to take possession of an item they both equally lay claim.

Before I go on with the feedback. I just want to make sure you are okay with a newbie like me; or are you wanting a more seasoned set of eyes to look it over.?

Thanks !




No man spending his precious time to do this, should be considered a newbie!! Waiting for your comments!! Regarding your logline i like the first part, while the second (feels to myself) creates more questions than answers.


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