There are a lot of grammatical errors throughout - you'll need to find a way to clean those up.
Quoted Text INT. MERLIN HOSPITAL - WAITING HALL - DAY
The waiting hall is just in front of the hospital bedrooms where patients rests. A period of silence followed by loud shrieks and moaning of a boy can be heard. In the bench, in front of the room no 401 sits BHUMIT(21), He has come to see his friend AMLESH(21) and is sweating in fear.
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No need to repeat the location (Hall) in the description when it is already in your header. Don't include unfilmables - only things we can see or hear. We can't see or hear that AMLESH is his best friend. Don't introduced a character until they are actually in the film. It should be something like this: INT. MERLIN HOSPITAL - WAITING HALL - DAY BHUMIT (21), sweating and nervous, sits on a bench just outside ROOM 401. In between moments of silence, the MOANING of a young male in pain echoes from the room. But the real issue is that you are not going to get far if you don't find a tool for that grammar. |