Very relatable story, well done.
Just needs polishing up as there are a few mistakes here and there.
"Were freshman after all" - don't forget it's we're.
"What are you talking about it's the beginning of the year no one cares about any of that" - question mark after about
Brandon tries his best to hide behind Laura - there could be a double space between this line and the one before it. It's good to have white space in screenwriting from what i've discovered. It flows a lot better.
"How about the Large mass trying to hide behind you?" - don't need capital letter on large.
"Im Jeremy and rank uh...freshman?" - I'm
"I,m Brandon and i'm a freshman." - I'm
"Yeah man if you don't like being as big you are change it" - doesn't make sense, instead you could put "Yeah man, if you're unhappy with your size you can take charge and change it"
"Speaking of partying, we few people with us - we have a few people with us.
Very good effort, just remember always always double check.
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