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Posted: April 8th, 2025, 9:19am Report to Moderator
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Wedding Day by Maxine Scythe - Short, Horror - A cruel revelation forces a groom to show his true self. 9 pages - pdf format

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Dear Maxine,
your very visual SP went in a direction I wasn't expecting! maybe introduce some misdirection between Johnny and Theo - a remembered prank which is infact untrue.
That gives the hint to what happens next - - Should Theo have a name like Jude (Judas Well written and visually stunning - all best -
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I appreciate the feedback!
I was thinking of changing Theo's name to mean "deceiver" or something, and I also considered inserting another scene in which the twist would make more sense.

Glad we're on the same page.  
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Maybe Theo should be called Judus. A very strange tale regarding rejection. Decently written but a little over the top for a short.  Maybe as part of a feature it would work better for me.


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I hear that.
I think I had a "Love, Death, and Robots" or "Two-Sentence Horror Story" idea in mind when I wrote it.
Something quick to the punch with a "wtf" ending.

And now I think I really will get Theo out of there, lol.

Thanks a lot for the feedback!  
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