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Posted by: Don, August 5th, 2019, 12:32pm
Turning Tables by Elizabeth Multer - Dramedy - Ditched by the bf whose career and life she's supported for years just at the moment of his success, Fran picks herself up and starts all over again, with the help of a few female friends in this unromantic comedy. 102 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: Sam, September 29th, 2019, 8:44am; Reply: 1
"they start playfully making out. Their three dogs—two pit
bulls and a terrier—come trotting out and join in. After
rolling around the living room, they collapse on the floor."

...This might need a rewrite.

I read the first ten. It's alright. Not terribly funny but it moves along and the writing is clear. A lot of the exposition is delivered through dialogue which leaves a shallow impression on the characters.
I would suggest showing (not telling) us how much Fran has given up for trev before he dumps her.
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