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OWC - Sunday is the Worst Day to Die of The Plaque (currently 3843 views) |
Don |
Posted: April 10th, 2009, 8:53pm |
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AdministratorAdministrator So, what are you writing?
LocationVirginia Posts16449 Posts Per Day 1.94 |
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steven8 |
Posted: April 10th, 2009, 11:32pm |
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Old Timer The Ed Wood of Simply Scripts
LocationBarberton, OH Posts1156 Posts Per Day 0.22 |
I think this is a wicked cool script. It's what if Disney made horror flicks! |
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Tommyp |
Posted: April 10th, 2009, 11:37pm |
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Been Around Continuity Is For Pussies...
LocationAustralia Posts701 Posts Per Day 0.12 |
Only true thing you've said all day Steven! I liked this one, bit weird though... Well done. |
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steven8 |
Posted: April 10th, 2009, 11:43pm |
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Old Timer The Ed Wood of Simply Scripts
LocationBarberton, OH Posts1156 Posts Per Day 0.22 |
Only true thing you've said all day Steven! I liked this one, bit weird though... Well done. |
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Zombie Sean |
Posted: April 10th, 2009, 11:46pm |
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LocationColorado Posts1547 Posts Per Day 0.23 |
This one was strange, but it was an odd, interesting take on a drama...Told through animals...Jorge reminds me of a young me (I'd always pull the legs off the Crane Flies or put June Bugs in microwaves) so I had someone to relate to. A shame he got the plague though......
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Dreamscale |
Posted: April 11th, 2009, 1:00am |
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This was interesting, and not badly written either. I guess it meets the challenge, as well.
Unique aspect to this for sure. I guess I kinda like it. Good job. Is it really drama, though? I don't know, but then again, I guess drama is pretty much anyhting and everything.
Best so far...by far! |
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Sham |
Posted: April 11th, 2009, 1:09am |
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LocationUSA Posts359 Posts Per Day 0.05 |
Man, this was weird. Well-written, but very weird.
When the squirrels first started talking about a revenge plot, I immediately thought of Family Guy, the episode where Meg does her bird calls, and two pigeons get really pissed at her ("I'm gonna go over there" -- "No" -- "I'm gonna go over there and punch her.")
Good work. |
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MBCgirl |
Posted: April 11th, 2009, 1:39am |
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New Some things are better left to the imagination!
LocationScottsdale Posts385 Posts Per Day 0.07 |
So far...this has risen to the top of the first 6 posted. Unique, creative, with a twist of revenge.
I liked it.
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When people and places come to life...that to me is exciting.
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JamminGirl |
Posted: April 11th, 2009, 2:12am |
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LocationToronto Ont. Posts335 Posts Per Day 0.06 |
What can I say, format excellent. Very visual. I didn't believe a boy could just be plain cruel without the parents even having an inkling or the sister not telling on him except when his parents confronted him. Didn't make sence. What were the children's ages? |
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stebrown |
Posted: April 11th, 2009, 2:51am |
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LocationNewcastle, England Posts881 Posts Per Day 0.15 |
I really liked this one. Pretty disturbing little kid but a real nice, revenge story with good motivation and believable dialogue. Very imaginative and well written.
I would have liked to know the kids' ages though, that's my one compaint. |
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Astrid |
Posted: April 11th, 2009, 7:24am |
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Cool story! My only qn is why is Jorge the way he is? Because I didnt know, the end felt a little incomplete. Just a tad. Really, it doesnt matter. Just what I was left thinking. Anyway, Nice! |
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Brian M |
Posted: April 11th, 2009, 2:23pm |
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LocationGlasgow Posts434 Posts Per Day 0.08 |
I liked this one, I was even a little creeped out by how bad Jorge really was. It would have been nice to know the ages of the kids but maybe it's not that important.
I would love to see this in made into a cartoon. |
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cloroxmartini |
Posted: April 12th, 2009, 11:14am |
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LocationYou know what a saguaro is? Posts803 Posts Per Day 0.14 |
I like this (melo)drama. In some place I can almost hear William Shatner's VO for Sam. |
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Murphy |
Posted: April 12th, 2009, 7:56pm |
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This was brilliant, a great idea and a well executed script. I am most impressed. I love the title too, one of the best titles for any script I have ever read at SS.
Very nicely done. |
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jayrex |
Posted: April 13th, 2009, 1:17pm |
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LocationLondon, UK Posts1420 Posts Per Day 0.22 |
This was a good script. And odd and creative piece that was interesting to read. A nice take on the theme and nothing to complain about. |
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seamus19382 |
Posted: April 13th, 2009, 3:20pm |
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Awwwww! How sweet! I'd keep Jorge away from the potato salad, the little bastard! This was great. A little hard to read, but nice to see Jorge get his in the end. Nicely done! |
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rc1107 |
Posted: April 13th, 2009, 3:31pm |
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LocationYoungstown Posts1241 Posts Per Day 0.20 |
The title alone interested me on this one, and it gave nothing away about the story, which I liked that aspect of it.
Yeah, I'm sure a lot of people might say that it was overly violent and visiually disturbing for a cartoon, but I liked that aspect of it, too. Who says there can't be adult cartoons with swearing?
I also thought it was an interesting take on the OWC, doing a cartoon.
Very well written, with good drama and a picnic, though I have to admit, that kind of torture to animals doesn't really get by parents that often.
Still a good story, though.
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Blakkwolfe |
Posted: April 13th, 2009, 3:42pm |
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LocationFlorida, USA Posts706 Posts Per Day 0.12 |
Yeah, a bit on the bizarre side, but fun...Something Ralph Bakshi might have done back in the day...How old was Jorge, the ant grinder, wing pulling serial killer to be? Makes a difference if he's 6 versus 13...No Proper introduction for Mom and Dad either, which gives the impression that this turned out relatively quickly...Really liked Vanessa's run on dialogue that would never stop for a breath even though she was turning blue she still had to get that last thought out before...phew...The squirrels, Sam and Lorraine, having human names made it a little more tricky to read...(Personally, it would have been slightly more twisted if Dad was typical redneck and secretly approved of his little squirts shenigans...as it is, he's just kind of bland...Liked the title and the creative manner in which vengence was wrought...one of the only manners that a squirrel can take out a snot nosed little punk...
Is Squirrel Noir a genre? Perhaps it will be... |
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