Morgan, I thought you did an excellent job with this!!! First off, it wasn't easy because your character was by herself, but I think you really made it work.

The transformation is really wonderful. She's making a stand (LOL -- Stand   ... I made a funny).

Really well done!!!

Sandra

Tracksheet is updated and emails are sent.  We're on the home stretch now.

Thanks Sandra and Dreamscale for the wonderful comments.  I think it does a writer good to hear them

I knew before it was my turn that I wanted to develop Sam's character from the original submitted description.  There was no chaos around her so it worked well to go into her more "Spiritual/Sentimental side of the plane and work that in from dreams and the current life.

I didn't want it to be boring...especially with one character...so hopefully it wasn't   Of course Dreamscale gave me a challenge to acquire a red Barchetta sports car...so that made it interesting...but when I figured out a way to make it happen, I tied that into her Grandmother and fond memories.  I actually loved my challenge as it made me be more creative with my post.   Thanks again Jeff.

I also think it would be fun to know after the post what the challenge for that entry was so we can see how it was incorporated into the post.

I'm also thinking - for future reference and collaborations like this that maybe at the top of our post we also submit a logline.  It would give us great practice on a part of writing sripts that seems to be hard at times.  It would also make referencing back to elements we need to check on a little easier.  

Anyway....sorry to ramble on...   Thank you again for the comments.

P.S.  Dana...I liked the interaction between Father Homes and Leona and you did a great job of selling that to the reader.  She had true insight into his struggle with his faith and I liked that.

Great job!

Quoted from MBCgirl P.S.  Dana...I liked the interaction between Father Homes and Leona and you did a great job of selling that to the reader.  She had true insight into his struggle with his faith and I liked that. Great job!

I really agree with you here Morgan. The question regarding Father Holmes' faith is really challenged in this movie and I truly believe it's warranted. Dana has brought that out and that's really important.

This movie has to be more than about choosing sides, it has to be about "why", and there also has to be reasons that the characters come up with on their own due to their personal experiences. It seems that that is truly what life itself is about: Choosing to rise to challenges and grow, or to wallow down in the depths of pity, anger, resentment, jealousy, fear...

As writers, we could come up with a whole slew of words from the negative spectrum, but the focus of this dilemma is clear and needs that filtering through the characters or it just becomes another "it's us against them" or "it" story.

I'm extremely pleased with the quality of writing in the posts as we've entered what are really critical times in the script and it's wonderful to see people rising to the challenge.

Sandra

When this challenge started we had to state which side we were on...for or against SHIVA.  Obviously it isn't just about which side we have chosen...but developing our characters based on the circumstances that are presented to us in the story as it develops.

Sam definitely took on a new persona...luring Eddy in with the deception of the snake.   She used it to get him back for Albert...and in a way Jack.

There are very few characters I feel this way about in the script whether they are for or against...so it will be harder and harder for me to get rid of characters I think.

I like the posts too because they are bringing more to the table in terms of developing not only the chracters, but also the story.

~m~

Hello guys. I'm just dropping by to tell you that I might be posting a little bit late due to an overwhelming amount of school work. But I'll get to it.

--Julio

Okay, I'm done. I just gotta check with Ripley, if he's around.

That doesn't sound too late at all.  Actually, I think you're early.  Nice!!!  Things are realy moving along nicely in here.

I'm here. I sent the editing comments.

Now that's team work!  Nice job!!!

Posted, guys. I hope you like it. Ripley said something that kind of worried me in a PM, so I'm hoping I did okay.

Don't hesitate to tell me if you have any problems with the scene.

--Julio

No, Julio.  You did horrible.  You killed Colin!!!!! Arrrrrgh! And I thought he was going to get in under the wire.

Just kidding.  You did swell, kid.

I think Ripley might be up next.  I'll update the tracksheet after I finish work for the day.

lol. I'm sorry! No, really, I am. It was a very tough choice. I really didn't want to kill any character.

--Julio

EUREKA!!! EUREKA!!! He's got it! Oh yeah!!! Do a little dance!!! Love it Julio!!!!

Wow and more wow!!! You really pulled this off big time!!! And after a whole lot of school work too!!!! I've got a couple things that I'd fix up with edits, but I am so thrilled with your scene you can't even imagine!!!

I'm glad there's not a ration on exclamation marks!!!!!!!

Way to go Julio!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sandra